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committerUnverified <unverified@openmailbox.org>2016-03-06 14:11:58 -0500
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Fixed a lot of grammar mistakes and reworded some dialogue for clarity.
Diffstat (limited to 'npc')
-rw-r--r--npc/000-1/ale.txt2
-rw-r--r--npc/000-1/couwan.txt2
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt32
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-2/moon.txt4
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-21/julia.txt4
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-22/alige.txt14
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-22/note.txt6
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-22/peter.txt2
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-24/nard.txt4
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt7
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-27/don.txt18
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt4
-rw-r--r--npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt2
13 files changed, 51 insertions, 50 deletions
diff --git a/npc/000-1/ale.txt b/npc/000-1/ale.txt
index 95738a0f..7d3bdf7b 100644
--- a/npc/000-1/ale.txt
+++ b/npc/000-1/ale.txt
@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@
mesn;
mesq l("Ouch...");
next;
- mesq l("These heavy boxes are killing me, I don't feel my arms anymore!");
+ mesq l("These heavy boxes are killing me, I can't feel my arms anymore!");
next;
menu
diff --git a/npc/000-1/couwan.txt b/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
index 82e69c8a..24bb24fd 100644
--- a/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
+++ b/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@
switch(select(
l("Very nice, indeed!"),
- l("I don't see anything else than... water?")))
+ l("I don't see anything else other than... water?")))
{
case 2:
mes "";
diff --git a/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt b/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
index f39e24e8..7106909a 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
@@ -21,8 +21,8 @@
function enora_quest {
speech 5,
- l("Black iron... That is a very specific request that you got me!"),
- l("Let me check on my inventory book..."),
+ l("Black iron... That is a very specific request that you have for me!"),
+ l("Let me check in my inventory book..."),
l("..."),
l("Yes, I have some! \"5x Black Iron Ingots\""),
l("Is this for you or somebody else? Because you need to be registered to obtain these materials.");
@@ -38,10 +38,10 @@
break;
case 2:
speech 1,
- l("Chelios... He is part of the blacksmith house, is not he?"),
+ l("Chelios... He is part of the blacksmith house, is he not?"),
l("Since Don settled in Artis he and his band refused to register to the Merchant Guild."),
- l("I will close my eyes for once, but only because it is your first time asking for something!"),
- l("Sometimes a good merchant need to reach out first. It's on the house, give Chelios my regards!");
+ l("I will close my eyes for once, but only because it's your first time asking for something!"),
+ l("Sometimes a good merchant needs to reach out first. It's on the house, give Chelios my regards!");
emotion 7;
break;
}
@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@
function first_visit {
speech 4,
l("Welcome!"),
- l("My name is Lloyd, I am a representant of the Merchant Guild of Artis.");
+ l("My name is Lloyd, I am a representative of the Merchant Guild of Artis.");
select (l("My name is @@...", strcharinfo(0)));
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@
l("\"@@\", I like this name!", strcharinfo(0)),
l("Oh, wait a second...");
narrator 4,
- l("Lloyd is searching something on his book.");
+ l("Lloyd is searching something in his book.");
speech 4,
l("I see."),
l("You are new around here, right?");
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@
if (Zeny < .@price)
{
speech 4,
- l("You do not seem to have enough money on yourself, come back later!");
+ l("You do not seem to have enough money, come back later!");
}
else
{
@@ -125,16 +125,16 @@
function paper_to_deliver {
speech 5,
- l("Now that you bring up that topic, that remind me of something..."),
- l("Not later than today there was this young seller named Fexil that passed by here."),
- l("He asked to lend some money and a place to open his store, I think that he asked for a place on the merchant square on the south-west of the city..."),
+ l("Now that you bring up that topic, that reminds me of something..."),
+ l("Earlier today there was this young seller named Fexil that passed by here."),
+ l("He asked to lend some money and a place to open his store, I think that he asked for a place on the merchant squares on the south-west of the city..."),
l("Anyway, he forgot his permit when he left the building."),
l("Could you bring it to him?");
do
{
.@q = select (l("Ok, I will bring it to him."),
- l("I need more informations first."),
+ l("I need more information first."),
l("I don't have the time."));
switch (.@q)
{
@@ -145,7 +145,7 @@
break;
case 2:
speech 5,
- l("You should look a seller named Fexil around the merchant square."),
+ l("You should look for a seller named Fexil around the merchant square."),
l("Ask other merchants, they might know where he is.");
break;
case 3:
@@ -247,10 +247,10 @@
.@enora = getq (ArtisQuests_Enora);
menuint rif (.@enora == 2, l("I'm searching some black iron ingots.")), 0,
- l("I would like to deposit some item."), 1,
- l("I would like to manage my money."), 2,
+ l("I would like to store some items."), 1,
+ l("I would like to deposit some money."), 2,
l("What is this guild for?"), 3,
- l("The guild has any work for me?"), 4,
+ l("Does the guild has any work for me right now?"), 4,
l("Bye."), 5;
switch (@menuret)
diff --git a/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt b/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
index e073d990..42fb137a 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@
if (.@q < 2)
{
mesn "Narrator";
- mes col(l("You see a young elven girl, with a grimace of pain on her face."), 9);
+ mes col(l("You see a young elven girl, with a strong sense of pain in her face."), 9);
next;
}
else
@@ -110,7 +110,7 @@ L_Story:
next;
mesq l("I didn't notice that a Pikpik was in my way, and when I stepped on it, my foot was full of spikes.");
next;
- mesq l("Luckily the beach is nearby, and somehow I could come home.");
+ mesq l("Luckily the beach is nearby, and somehow I made my way home.");
next;
mesq l("Please bring me some @@ so I can pull out these spikes from my foot.", getitemlink("CrocClaw"));
next;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt b/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
index abb1b63f..1296b097 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ L_Menu:
l("Is it possible to go back to the island?"), L_Island,
l("Could you explain to me where I am?"), L_WhereIam,
l("What happened to me?"), L_What,
- l("Can I read these rules again?"), L_Rules,
+ l("Can I read the rules again?"), L_Rules,
l("Nothing, sorry."), L_Quit;
L_YNMenu:
@@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ L_What:
L_Rules:
mes "";
mesn;
- mesq l("Of course, they are on the left wall, go have a look at them.");
+ mesq l("Of course, they are on the left wall. Go have a look at them.");
next;
mesq l("Do you have any other questions for me?");
next;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt b/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
index cdad1663..6e906446 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
@@ -110,9 +110,9 @@ L_ExplainHiding:
setcamnpc;
mes "";
mesn;
- mesq l("No, I can't. I won't! All is I wanted was to travel across the seas for fun, growl... sniff. And in this chink in the wall, as you can see, I have lots of fun.");
+ mesq l("No, I can't. I won't! All I wanted was to travel across the seas for fun, growl... sniff. And in this chink in the wall, as you can see, I have lots of fun.");
next;
- mesq l("Oh... um... actually... all is I wanted was to get to Artis. Err... but I didn't, ah, have enough money to pay for the ferry!");
+ mesq l("Oh... um... actually... all I wanted was to get to Artis. Err... but I didn't, ah, have enough money to pay for the ferry!");
next;
mesq l("Please don't tell people you saw me. I don't want to be decapitated or get thrown into the sea as food for sharks, or get my hair mussed!");
next;
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@ L_AboutReward:
L_Accept:
menu
l("Understood, I will help you."), L_FirstAccepted,
- l("We arrived to Artis today."), L_Artis,
+ l("We arrived in Artis today."), L_Artis,
l("I think I should report you to the crew members."), -;
setcamnpc;
@@ -144,7 +144,7 @@ L_Artis:
setcamnpc;
mes "";
mesn;
- mesq l("Of course, so why do I still see plain sea from the porthole?");
+ mesq l("Of course, so why do I still see open sea from the porthole?");
next;
mesq l("I wonder who is in delarium now...");
next;
@@ -232,7 +232,7 @@ L_NoReward:
L_Drunk:
setcamnpc;
speech 5,
- l("I asked for food but... *hips* Ah, that'll do so!");
+ l("I asked for food but... *hips* Ah, that'll do nicely!");
restorecam;
goto L_GiveFood;
@@ -283,7 +283,7 @@ L_IntroMenu:
l("Yes."), L_GiveFood,
l("Where can I find some food?"), L_FindFood,
l("Why are you hiding?") + " " + l("Why don't you come out?"), L_ExplainHiding,
- l("We arrived to Artis today."), L_Artis,
+ l("We arrived in Artis today."), L_Artis,
l("I think I should report you to the crew members."), -;
setcamnpc;
@@ -299,7 +299,7 @@ L_FindFood:
next;
mesq l("I'd like to catch one of them, but they fly away when I try.");
next;
- mesq l("Walkig around a bit, it'll be easy for you to catch one, I bet. Impale one of them for me please.");
+ mesq l("Walking around a bit, it'll be easy for you to catch one, I bet. Impale one of them for me please.");
next;
restorecam;
mesn "Narrator";
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/note.txt b/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
index 9abaeb18..03e79769 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
@@ -25,9 +25,9 @@ L_Content:
mes l("Don't worry sister, I didn't forget you");
next;
- mes l("I hope to come back at home when days will be better");
- mes l("And when we will got enought money to don't depend of anybody");
+ mes l("I hope to come back home when the days are better");
+ mes l("And when we have enough money to support ourselves and not depend on anybody");
- mes l("Dearly yours, Dan") + "\"";
+ mes l("Sincerely yours, Dan") + "\"";
close;
}
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt b/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
index 5cfe02f5..53b8417e 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ OnReturnFail:
OnReturnWin:
.@peter = getq(ShipQuests_Peter);
mesn;
- mesq l("Thanks again for helping me. Drats these rattos for infesting our fair vessal! They are a permanent problem; so you can always be sure that your help with the extermination, to keep their numbers under control, is very welcome indeed. But the situation is, that I can give you a reward only the one time.");
+ mesq l("Thanks again for helping me. Drats these rattos for infesting our fair vessal! They are a permanent problem; so you can always be sure that your help with the extermination will be greatly appreciated, to keep their numbers under control, is very welcome indeed. unfortunately, I can give you a reward only the one time.");
next;
if (.@peter == 3 || .@peter == 4)
diff --git a/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt b/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
index 2b334d7c..e88b5848 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
speech 5,
l("We just returned from a long journey and Artis is a good city to rest and to conclude our exchange."),
- l("I think that we will stay in port for a great time, though, if you want to visit some near place we could take you there."),
+ l("I think that we will stay in port for a great time, though, if you want to visit some nearby we could take you there."),
l("Do you want to go somewhere?");
switch (select(l("Lost Island."),
@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@
L_Lost :
mes "";
mesn;
- mesq l("Julia make appeal the Legion of Aemil to search you, exit the ship and you should see your escort!");
+ mesq l("Julia made an appeal to the Legion of Aemil to get in touch with you, exit the ship and you should see your escort!");
next;
closedialog;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt b/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
index 45a45db8..6538eeb6 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
@@ -1,3 +1,4 @@
+
// Evol scripts.
// Author:
// Reid
@@ -10,13 +11,13 @@
speech 5,
l("I am an alchemist, I bear the name of Ivan."),
l("I work under the protection and the supervision of the Legion of Aemil."),
- l("Alchemical studies are prohibited in every cities of the Archipelagos, do not dare to practice in a public zone!");
+ l("Alchemical studies are prohibited in every city of the Archipelagos, do not dare to practice it in a public zone!");
return;
}
function enora_quest {
- speech 5, l("How many? What kind? I can produce two dozen of box per day.");
+ speech 5, l("How many? What kind? I can produce two dozen boxes per day.");
select (l("5 Pibberies Infusion."));
@@ -27,7 +28,7 @@
select (l("You missunderstood, it's 5 potions."));
speech 5,
- l("Why the Legion would request my help for only 5 potions?"),
+ l("Why would the Legion request my help for only 5 potions?"),
l("Is this some kind of joke?!");
switch (select (l("Enora needs them."),
diff --git a/npc/001-2-27/don.txt b/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
index 17c50eee..fddde8a5 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
@@ -17,12 +17,12 @@
function card_explanation {
speech 5,
l("There are two different kinds of card, the first changes the style of your clothes, the second changes their stats."),
- l("I am not an expert of the first kind, but I know what I am talking about for the second."),
+ l("I am not an expert of the first kind, but I know what I am talking about when it comes to improving equipment"),
l("A stat card works on different pieces of equipment."),
- l("Each equipment has a predefined slot number."),
- l("Each cards improve your gear by a ratio or a fixed number on a predefined stat."),
- l("Like, a defensive mythril card can be used on any mythril equipment, and it will improve of 5% the defense of the latter."),
- l("You just have to select it, you choose on which piece of equipment you want to use it, and you are done.");
+ l("Each piece of equipment has a predefined slot number."),
+ l("Each card improves your gear by a ratio or a fixed number on a predefined stat."),
+ l("Like, a defensive mythril card can be used on any mythril equipment, and it will improve the defense by 5% of the latter."),
+ l("You just have to select the card, then you choose which piece of equipment you want to use it on, and you are done.");
return;
}
@@ -34,16 +34,16 @@
select (l("What about Chelios?"));
speech 5,
- l("Chelios was stubborn in his youth, he could not stop to annoy me with his questions while I was working at the forge."),
+ l("Chelios was stubborn in his youth, he never stopped annoying me with his questions while I was working at the forge."),
l("He did not change while growing up, I repeatedly asked him to leave the forge but in the end he installed himself in front of it..."),
- l("He is mature and he rarely ask questions so I am fine. I can not stand the sight of a whinger anyway.");
+ l("He is mature and he rarely ask questions so I am fine. I can not stand the sight of a whiner anyway.");
return;
}
function good_blacksmith {
speech 5,
- l("I do not like to brag about it but you will not find any better blacksmith on the whole island."),
- l("If you need somebody to craft a weapon or a plate from a diagrams I am the one that you need.");
+ l("I do not like to brag about it but you won't find a better blacksmith on the whole island."),
+ l("If you need somebody to craft a weapon or a plate from diagrams I am the one that you need.");
switch (select (l("Can I craft them myself?"),
l("Ok.")))
diff --git a/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt b/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
index 641fd93b..c447f7e3 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
@@ -22,11 +22,11 @@
speech 5,
l("I used a card to improve my clothes."),
l("There're two different kinds of card, the first changes the style of your clothes, the second changes their stats."),
- l("You should discuss with Don and Calypsan if you want to learn more about it, they are master on this area!");
+ l("You should discuss with Don and Calypsan if you want to learn more about it, they are masters on this area!");
break;
case 3:
speech 5,
- l("You are on the Blacksmith's house, by Jove!"),
+ l("You are in the Blacksmith's house, by Jove!"),
l("Don is a renowned blacksmith throughout Andorra it's crazy that you don't know about him.");
break;
case 4:
diff --git a/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt b/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
index 753b285b..9f6d7ad6 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@
speech 12,
l("I am new in this town, just like you are."),
l("I came here, looking for a better life."),
- l("I still didn't find a cheap building to open my own business, so for now I stay in this inn."),
+ l("I still didn't find a cheap building to open my own business, so for now I will stay in this inn."),
l("I'm a barber, you see. I can change your hair style or color to your liking.");
Edouard_StoryTold = 1;