Update arpan.txt Fixed typos, eliminated excess and changed some wording.

1 files changed, 23 insertions, 22 deletions

diff --git a/npc/002-1/arpan.txt b/npc/002-1/arpan.txt
index 6a3dd2d12..e1e13a8fa 100644
--- a/npc/002-1/arpan.txt
+++ b/npc/002-1/arpan.txt
@@ -45,26 +45,26 @@ OnTalk:
 
     mesq lg("Yeye, are you finally ready to go?");
     if (!TUTORIAL)
-        mesc l("Protip: You skipped tutorial. A lot of tutorial-ish dialogs and quests will be skipped. You can change this anytime on %s > Game Settings.", b("@ucp"));
+        mesc l("Protip: You skipped the tutorial. A lot of tutorial related dialog and quests will be skipped. You can change this anytime in %s > Game Settings.", b("@ucp"));
     next;
 
     select
         l("Yes, I want to find out who I am."),
-        l("No, but what option do I have? I'm railroaded!");
+        l("No, but what option do I have? I'm being railroaded!");
     mes "";
 
     if (@menu == 2) {
         mesn;
-        mesq l("Yeye is not paying for your food and is not a sailor like us! You should start standing on your own feet.");
+        mesq l("Ye not paying for your food and ye isn't a sailor like us! Ye should be standing on your own two feet.");
         next;
         mesn strcharinfo(0);
-        mesq l("Thanks for the honestity, I guess.");
+        mesq l("Thanks for your honesty, I guess.");
         next;
     }
 
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Anyway, our shipkeeper, Juliet, helped to heal your injuries way back.");
+    mesq l("Anyway, you should be thanking Juliet, she's the one who patched you up.");
     next;
     mesn;
     if (.@q_julia == 0)
@@ -79,15 +79,15 @@ OnTalk:
 
 
 L_Menu:
-    mesq l("What yeye could I do for you today?");
+    mesq l("What-yeye could I do for you today?");
     next;
 
     menu
         rif(.@q_julia < 2, lg("Where can I find Juliet?")), L_Julia,
-        rif(!.@n, lg("Could you tell me where I am?")), L_Where,
+        rif(!.@n, l("Can you tell me where I am?")), L_Where,
         rif(!.@n, l("Who are you?")), L_Who,
         rif(!.@n, l("I need a tutorial, where can I find help?")), L_Trainer,
-        rif(!getq(ShipQuests_ArpanMoney), lg("Do you know what happened to the gold I had when you guys saved me?")), L_WhereMoney,
+        rif(!getq(ShipQuests_ArpanMoney), l("Do you know what happened to the gold I had on me when I was rescued?")), L_WhereMoney,
         l("Nothing, sorry."), -;
 
     closedialog;
@@ -96,27 +96,27 @@ L_Menu:
 L_Trainer:
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("There is a NPC called Trainer, just outside this ship.");
+    mesq l("There is an NPC called Trainer, just outside the ship.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Just use the arrow key--, err, I mean, just walk to the door on the right. The one which is not guarded by Peter.");
+    mesq l("Just use the arrow key--, err, I mean, just walk to the door on the right. It's the one not guarded by Peter.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq lg("You must be dressed, and talk to our captain first. He'll give you a mission and unlock the ship main door.");
+    mesq lg("Make sure you're dressed and then speak with the captain. He'll give you a mission and unlock the ship's main door.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("All you need to do then is walk outside, enter on the biggest house, and talk to the Trainer. He'll teach you everything.");
+    mesq l("All you need to do is walk outside, enter the biggest house, and speak with the Trainer. He'll teach you everything you need to know.");
     next;
     goto L_Menu;
 
 L_Where:
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq lg("You're on our ship, we made port to a little island and we're actually yeyending our long merchant travelling adventure at the city of Tulimshar.");
+    mesq lg("You're aboard our ship. We made port to a little island and we're actually yeye-ending our long merchant travelling adventure at the city of Tulimshar.");
     next;
-    mesq l("We will be yaying there in a few days, so we will drop you off there.");
+    mesq l("We will be yeye-ing there in a few days, so we'll part ways there.");
     next;
-    mesq l("You will see, citizens are polite and you can still ask around for help. They can help find a job for you or maybe help you find out what happened to you out at sea!");
+    mesq l("You will notice the citizens are polite and they might help you find a job or help you figure out what happened to you out at sea.");
     next;
 
     goto L_Menu;
@@ -128,7 +128,7 @@ L_Julia:
     next;
 
     mesn "Narrator";
-    mesc l("Use the arrow keys to walk right and meet Juliet.");
+    mesc l("Use the arrow keys to walk over to the right and meet Juliet.");
     next;
 
     goto L_Menu;
@@ -136,10 +136,10 @@ L_Julia:
 L_Who:
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Sorry! I forgot to introduce myself. My name is Arpan, but other sailors call me Magic Arpan because I know one or two yaing magic tricks.");
+    mesq l("Sorry! Allow me to introduce myself. My name is Arpan, but the other sailors call me Magic Arpan because I know one or two ya-ing magic tricks.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("They're not magic, but yayaya, people like to say it is! Yeyeye.");
+    mesq l("They're not magic, but yayaya, people like to say it is! Yeyeye!");
     next;
 
     goto L_Menu;
@@ -147,7 +147,7 @@ L_Who:
 L_WhereMoney:
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Oh right, I totally forgot about that, here you go.");
+    mesq l("Oh right, I almost forgot, here you go!");
     next;
 
     if (BaseLevel < 4) goto L_Apana;
@@ -159,7 +159,8 @@ L_WhereMoney:
 
 L_Apana:
     mesn;
-    mesq l("On hindsight, I'll wait you get a few levels. Can't have cheaters, ya know!");
+    mesq l("On second thought, come see me when you've gained a few levels. We can't have cheaters, ya know?");
+    tutmes l("You need to have level %d or above.", 4);
     next;
     goto L_Menu;
 
@@ -173,10 +174,10 @@ OnSlow:
     setcamnpc;
     showavatar NPC_MAGIC_ARPAN;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Yayaya, @@ is surely slow. Do you remember how to walk? You can use arrow keys for that!", strcharinfo(0));
+    mesq l("Yayaya, @@ is surely slow. Don't you remember how to walk? You can use arrow keys for that!", strcharinfo(0));
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesc l("Here, come talk to me, the Magic Arpan! I'll help you get dressed."), 1;
+    mesc l("Here, speak to me, Magic Arpan! I'll help you get dressed."), 1;
     */
     addtimer(90000,"Magic Arpan::OnSlow");
     close;