Spelling and grammar.

Artaxe, Beuss, Calypsan, Carmie, Chelios, Enora, and Fexil.

7 files changed, 31 insertions, 31 deletions

diff --git a/npc/001-1/artaxe.txt b/npc/001-1/artaxe.txt
index 34331557..c6dc4ea6 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/artaxe.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/artaxe.txt
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 
 001-1,90,31,0	script	Artaxe	NPC_ARTAXE,{
     speech 4,
-        l("Sorry buddy, you can't pass by this way, we're actually moving some fourniture."),
+        l("Sorry buddy, you can't pass by this way, we're moving some furniture."),
         l("Come back later!");
 
     closedialog;
diff --git a/npc/001-1/beuss.txt b/npc/001-1/beuss.txt
index f8843500..694b6438 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/beuss.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/beuss.txt
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
     initnpctimer;
     .dir = 4;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("You are too weak, what is a piece of boneless jelly like you doing around here?");
+    mesq l("You seem pathetically weak, what is such boneless jelly like you doing around here?");
 
     goto L_Close;
 
diff --git a/npc/001-1/calypsan.txt b/npc/001-1/calypsan.txt
index 200f228a..9450667e 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/calypsan.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/calypsan.txt
@@ -35,7 +35,7 @@
 
 
     speech 4,
-        l("Yoiis is jealous of rainbow sky?"),
+        l("Yoiis envies a rainbow in the sky?"),
         l("It is possible to yeye your cloth with my beautiful dyes."),
         l("What does yoiis want today?");
 
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@
         menuint
             rif(.@fexil == 1, l("Have you seen Fexil?")), 0,
             l("[Trade]"), 1,
-            l("How does these dyes works?"), 2,
+            l("How do these dyes work?"), 2,
             l("I want to make my own dyes."), 3,
             l("[Quit]"), 4;
 
diff --git a/npc/001-1/carmie.txt b/npc/001-1/carmie.txt
index 014664c0..02d0dfdc 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/carmie.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/carmie.txt
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
 //    Carmie, walking NPC of the legion of Aemil on the center part of Artis.
 
 001-1,86,66,0	script	Carmie#001-1	NPC_RAIJIN_FEMALE_LEGION_ARTIS,{
-    npctalk3 l("I'm busy right now, I will get back to you later.");
+    npctalk3 l("I'm a little busy right now; not in the mood to chat.");
     close;
 
 OnTimer1000:
diff --git a/npc/001-1/chelios.txt b/npc/001-1/chelios.txt
index dd968b69..73638d41 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/chelios.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/chelios.txt
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@
                 break;
             case 2:
                 speech 5,
-                    l("I will stay here, come back when you will be free.");
+                    l("I'll be here, come back when you're ready.");
 
                 return;
         }
@@ -58,7 +58,7 @@
         speech 5,
             l("Oh... Awesome!"),
             l("You were gone; I thought you let me down. Some black iron was given to me by Don... after I asked nearly ten times."),
-            l("But thank you anyway, I can refund him now!"),
+            l("But thank you anyway! I can refund him now!"),
             l("Say hi to Enora for me!");
 
         return;
diff --git a/npc/001-1/enora.txt b/npc/001-1/enora.txt
index e22a702c..5e6daa61 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/enora.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/enora.txt
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@
         {
             case 1:
                 speech 5,
-                    l("Oh, don't worry about it, there will be a compensation for your hard labor!");
+                    l("Some tasks will help you become aquainted with Artis. Trust me.");
                 break;
             case 2:
                 mes "";
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@
         speech 4,
             l("I asked Don our blacksmith to prepare a black iron sword for this morning, he should be done by now."),
             l("Go to meet him, and return me the package, it's an easy task."),
-            l("You will be able to find Don's house on the west of this city, it's the first house just after left bridge, you can't miss it!"),
+            l("You will be able to find Don's house in the west of this city, it's the first house just after left bridge, you can't miss it!"),
             l("A young apprentice called Chelios might be waiting outside, speak to him, and return the present to me.");
             emotion 3;
 
@@ -122,10 +122,10 @@
         speech 5,
             l("Awesome!"),
             l("I have one more task for you, Trozz, another member of the Legion, sent me a letter earlier today."),
-            l("Some citizen are worried about the growing number of Fluffies on the hill of Artis."),
-            l("Some childs are playing there, it's not safe to let these wild ball of fur wandering next to them."),
-            l("It would have been a pleasure for me to sort this out but I'm too busy on the dock with the arrival of Nard's vessel. So I count on your help!"),
-            l("I might stay stuck here for a little while and it's dangerous to go there alone, take these!");
+            l("Some citizens are worried about the growing number of Fluffies on the hill of Artis."),
+            l("Childeren play there; and can be badly hurt if they play near a Fluffy's nest."),
+            l("It would have been easy for me to handle it, but you can earn respect by killing Fluffies in place of their natural-predator!"),
+            l("Besides, I need to be here to watch for thieves while La Johanne is docked. You're looking confident so take these!");
 
         setq ArtisQuests_Enora, 7;
         set ArtisFluffyKilled, 0;
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@
         getitem PibberiesInfusion, 5;
 
         speech 4,
-            l("Do you know where is the hill?");
+            l("Do you know where the hill is?");
 
         switch (select (l("Yes I do."),
                         l("Please guide me.")))
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@
                 break;
             case 2:
                 speech 5,
-                    l("Go to the up of the river, and cross the river twice with the two bridges on the north."),
+                    l("Follow up-stream, and cross the river twice with the two bridges on the north."),
                     l("The hill is located on the north-east of Artis.");
                 break;
         }
@@ -205,17 +205,17 @@
             l("Don is renowned throughout the archipelagos for his forgery here on Artis."),
             l("It's a great honnor for us at the Legion to hold the security of his commerce."),
             l("If you search for him you should look to the west of this city, it's the first house just after left bridge, you can't miss it!"),
-            l("Chelios his apprentice practice most of the time outside.");
+            l("Chelios, his apprentice, practices outside, mostly.");
 
         return;
     }
 
     function enora_legion {
         speech 5,
-            l("The Legion of Aemil is a group of mercenary who vowed to protect and serve their neighbours."),
-            l("We offer different kind of training sessions and we also have a board with open tasks for the city and its surrounding."),
-            l("It's a very good place if you want to make some money, but it will also help you to travel througout the archipelagos!"),
-            l("Each big city host a Legion chapter, Artis's chapter building is located on the north-west.");
+            l("The Legion of Aemil is a group of mercenaries who vowed to protect and serve their neighbors."),
+            l("We have various training sessions, and also a board with open tasks for the city and its surroundings."),
+            l("It's a good place to earn money, and also help you to travel throughout the archipelagos!"),
+            l("Each big city host a Legion chapter, Artis' chapter building is located in the North-West.");
 
         return;
     }
@@ -231,8 +231,8 @@
 
     function enora_hill {
         speech 5,
-            l("Go to the up of the river, and cross the river twice with the two bridges on the north."),
-            l("The hill is located on the north-east of Artis.");
+            l("Go to the up of the river, and cross the river twice with the two bridges in the North."),
+            l("The hill is located in the North-East of Artis.");
 
         return;
     }
@@ -264,8 +264,8 @@
             rif(.@q >= 5, l("Where is the light armor shop?")), 4,
             rif(.@q >= 7, l("Where is the market?")), 5,
             rif(.@q >= 10, l("Where is the hill?")), 6,
-            rif(.@q >= 1, l("What is this legion?")), 7,
-            rif(.@q >= 10, l("How many Fluffy did I kill on the hill?")), 8,
+            rif(.@q >= 1, l("What is this \"legion\"?")), 7,
+            rif(.@q >= 10, l("How many Fluffies did I kill on the hill?")), 8,
             l("I wish I could remember something..."), 9,
             rif(.@q != 0, l("Nothing.")), 10;
 
diff --git a/npc/001-1/fexil.txt b/npc/001-1/fexil.txt
index ddf908b0..559a58cf 100644
--- a/npc/001-1/fexil.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1/fexil.txt
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@
                 break;
             case 2:
                 speech 5,
-                    l("Oh... Ok, I will stay around here if you change you rmind.");
+                    l("Oh... Ok, I will stay around here if you change your mind.");
                 break;
         }
         return;
@@ -50,20 +50,20 @@
     {
         select (l("I have your pass from the Merchant Guild."));
         speech 5,
-            l("Oh!!! You save me, I was too afraid to unpack my stuff with this pass."),
+            l("Oh! You saved me, I was too afraid to unpack my stuff without this pass."),
             l("Hey, I remember you, we were on the same boat, you are the castaway.");
 
         switch (select (l("Yes I am."),
-                        l("You confusing me with another.")))
+                        l("You're confusing me with another.")))
         {
             case 1:
                 speech 5,
                     l("Oh sure I remember you."),
-                    l("The travel was fine for you? For me it was a hell, I think that I am seesick.");
+                    l("The travel was fine for you? It was terrible for me; I was sea-sick.");
                 break;
             case 2:
                 speech 5,
-                    l("Ah, I didn't have much sleep, it's possible.");
+                    l("Ah, I didn't have much sleep; it's possible.");
                 break;
         }
         setq ArtisQuests_Fexil, 2;
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@
         l("OK, let's trade."), 1,
         rif(.@fexil == 2, l("Do you still need help?")), 2,
         rif(.@fexil > 2 && countitem(729) > 0, l("I have some fur for you.")), 3,
-        l("No, Sorry."), 4;
+        l("No. Sorry."), 4;
 
     switch (@menuret)
     {
@@ -96,7 +96,7 @@
 
         case 3:
             speech 5,
-                l("Awesome, how many of those do you want to give me?");
+                l("Awesome. How many of those do you want to give me?");
 
             do
             {