Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing

All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.

1 files changed, 11 insertions, 11 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt b/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt
index 1e41e555..81f994eb 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
     if (OrumQuest > 23) goto L_PlacedThirdFlower;
     if (OrumQuest == 23) goto L_ThirdFlower;
 
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd about this place.";
     end;
 
 L_ThirdFlower:
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_ThirdFlower:
     if (isin("018-1.gat", 82, 28, 84, 30))
         goto L_Place;
 
-    mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away.";
+    mes "This isn't working, you're too far away.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Place:
@@ -37,8 +37,8 @@ L_Place:
     if (countitem("WhiteSummonFlower") < 1)
         goto L_NoFlower;
     delitem "WhiteSummonFlower", 1;
-    mes "Knowing what will happen, you prepare yourself for a fight. Then you go ahead and place the magical flower.";
-    mes "You feel the familiar tension around you. Here they come.";
+    mes "Knowing what will happen, you prepare yourself for a fight. Then you go ahead with the ritual and place the magical flower.";
+    mes "You feel the now familiar tension around you. Here they come.";
     set OrumQuest, 24;
     close2;
     areamonster "018-1.gat", 73, 22, 89, 36, "", 1105, 1, "#FlowerPentagram3::OnSquirrelDeath";
@@ -84,24 +84,24 @@ OnAScorpionDeath:
 
 L_MonstersAlive:
     mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence.";
-    mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!";
+    mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!";
     next;
     mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_NoFlower:
-    mes "You reach into your inventory to take out the flower and place it. But you can't find it!";
-    mes "Did you lose it somewhere along the way? If you can't find it again, go talk to Orum.";
+    mes "You reach into your inventory to take out the flower and place it, but you can't find it!";
+    mes "Did you lose it somewhere along the way? If you can't find it, go talk to Orum again.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedThirdFlower:
-    mes "You see the place where you put the third of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "You can feel the magic power around the place, waiting to be unleashed.";
+    mes "You placed the third of Orum's magical flowers on this spot.";
+    mes "You can feel the magical power around the place, waiting to be unleashed.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedFifthFlower:
-    mes "You remember this place. Here you put the third of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot.";
+    mes "You remember this place. You placed the third of Orum's magical flowers here.";
+    mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close: