From 5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Dino Paskvan Date: Mon, 15 Jul 2013 16:05:44 +0200 Subject: Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna. --- world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt | 22 +++++++++++----------- 1 file changed, 11 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/018-1') diff --git a/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt b/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt index 1e41e555..81f994eb 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/018-1/flowerpentagram3.txt @@ -7,7 +7,7 @@ if (OrumQuest > 23) goto L_PlacedThirdFlower; if (OrumQuest == 23) goto L_ThirdFlower; - message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place."; + message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd about this place."; end; L_ThirdFlower: @@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_ThirdFlower: if (isin("018-1.gat", 82, 28, 84, 30)) goto L_Place; - mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away."; + mes "This isn't working, you're too far away."; goto L_Close; L_Place: @@ -37,8 +37,8 @@ L_Place: if (countitem("WhiteSummonFlower") < 1) goto L_NoFlower; delitem "WhiteSummonFlower", 1; - mes "Knowing what will happen, you prepare yourself for a fight. Then you go ahead and place the magical flower."; - mes "You feel the familiar tension around you. Here they come."; + mes "Knowing what will happen, you prepare yourself for a fight. Then you go ahead with the ritual and place the magical flower."; + mes "You feel the now familiar tension around you. Here they come."; set OrumQuest, 24; close2; areamonster "018-1.gat", 73, 22, 89, 36, "", 1105, 1, "#FlowerPentagram3::OnSquirrelDeath"; @@ -84,24 +84,24 @@ OnAScorpionDeath: L_MonstersAlive: mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence."; - mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!"; + mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!"; next; mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself."; goto L_Close; L_NoFlower: - mes "You reach into your inventory to take out the flower and place it. But you can't find it!"; - mes "Did you lose it somewhere along the way? If you can't find it again, go talk to Orum."; + mes "You reach into your inventory to take out the flower and place it, but you can't find it!"; + mes "Did you lose it somewhere along the way? If you can't find it, go talk to Orum again."; goto L_Close; L_PlacedThirdFlower: - mes "You see the place where you put the third of Orum's magical flowers."; - mes "You can feel the magic power around the place, waiting to be unleashed."; + mes "You placed the third of Orum's magical flowers on this spot."; + mes "You can feel the magical power around the place, waiting to be unleashed."; goto L_Close; L_PlacedFifthFlower: - mes "You remember this place. Here you put the third of Orum's magical flowers."; - mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot."; + mes "You remember this place. You placed the third of Orum's magical flowers here."; + mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here."; goto L_Close; L_Close: -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50