Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing

All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.

1 files changed, 16 insertions, 16 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt b/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt
index b6e38d0d..c3f2ebc8 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt
@@ -9,41 +9,41 @@ L_Talk:
         goto L_Chat;
 
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"Hold on! My master doesn't wish to get disturbed! I can't let you enter.\"";
+    mes "\"Hold there! My master does not wish to be disturbed! I cannot let you enter.\"";
     menu
         "Who is your master?", L_Master,
         "But I have important things I need to discuss with your master!", L_Helped,
         "Oh, so he's finally back?", L_Back,
-        "Ok, ok.", L_Close;
+        "Okay, okay.", L_Close;
 
 L_Back:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"Yeah, finally... He was gone for quite a while, and now he came back with this scary and quainty guy...\"";
+    mes "\"Yes, he was gone for quite a while. When he arrived home, he had a rather frightening looking guy with him.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Ehem, I mean. Yes, mortal. He came back into his residence and doesn't wish to interact with those below his dignity. Leave.\"";
+    mes "\"Ahem, I mean, yes Mortal. He came back to his residence and does not wish to interact with those below his status. Leave!\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Master:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"He's a powerful wizard. He can force the elements to obey his will. He talks to demons and higher beings from the astral plane, such as I am.\"";
+    mes "\"He is a powerful wizard. He can force the very elements to obey his will! He regularly communes with demons and higher beings from the astral plane, such as myself.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Mankind knows him with under the name 'Orum'.\"";
+    mes "\"Mankind knows his name as 'Orum'.\"";
     menu
         "Hey, I helped him out some while ago!", L_Helped,
-        "Orum? That guy who feels weary due to some transmution spells?", L_Disrespectful,
+        "Orum? That guy who feels weary due to some transmutation spells?", L_Disrespectful,
         "Then I better respect his wish and leave!", L_Close;
 
 L_Disrespectful:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"WHAT are you saying? Are you making fun of my master?! You'll regret that!\"";
+    mes "\"What are you saying? Who are you to mock my Master?! You will regret that!\"";
     set Hp, 1 + Hp/5;
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Helped:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"Really? That sounds unplausible to me...\"";
+    mes "\"Really? That sounds implausible to me.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Why should my master mess around with such a puny mortal as you are?\"";
+    mes "\"Why would my master mess around with such a puny mortal as yourself?\"";
     menu
         "I'd like to offer him my humble services...", L_Pass,
         "Listen, he'll get angry if you don't let me pass. ", L_Pass,
@@ -51,25 +51,25 @@ L_Helped:
 
 L_Pass:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"Mh. Mh... All right, I let you pass.\"";
+    mes "\"Alright, I will let you pass.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Remember to talk to him with befitting respect.\"";
+    mes "\"Remember that when you speak with him, do so with respect for someone befitting his status.\"";
     set OrumQuest, 15;
     warp "017-4.gat", 201, 26;
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Block:
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"Stop, mortal! I can't let you pass!\"";
+    mes "\"Stop, mortal! I cannot let you pass!\"";
     menu
         "What? Who are you?", -,
         "Why?", -,
         "Ok...", L_Close;
     mes "[Guarding Spirit]";
-    mes "\"My master summoned me for the sole purpose to prevent his refuge being entered during his absence.";
-    mes "I'll guard this cave with all my power!\"";
+    mes "\"My master summoned me for the sole purpose of preventing anyone else from entering his refuge.";
+    mes "I'll stand guard and protect it with all my power!\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Because... otherwise he'll punish me. That hurts.\"";
+    mes "\"If I fail, he will punish me. I do not like being punished by his magic, it hurts.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Chat: