Fixed a lot of grammar mistakes and reworded some dialogue for clarity.

13 files changed, 51 insertions, 50 deletions

diff --git a/npc/000-1/ale.txt b/npc/000-1/ale.txt
index 95738a0f..7d3bdf7b 100644
--- a/npc/000-1/ale.txt
+++ b/npc/000-1/ale.txt
@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@
     mesn;
     mesq l("Ouch...");
     next;
-    mesq l("These heavy boxes are killing me, I don't feel my arms anymore!");
+    mesq l("These heavy boxes are killing me, I can't feel my arms anymore!");
     next;
 
     menu
diff --git a/npc/000-1/couwan.txt b/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
index 82e69c8a..24bb24fd 100644
--- a/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
+++ b/npc/000-1/couwan.txt
@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@
 
     switch(select(
         l("Very nice, indeed!"),
-        l("I don't see anything else than... water?")))
+        l("I don't see anything else other than... water?")))
     {
         case 2:
             mes "";
diff --git a/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt b/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
index f39e24e8..7106909a 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-19/lloyd.txt
@@ -21,8 +21,8 @@
 
     function enora_quest {
         speech 5,
-            l("Black iron... That is a very specific request that you got me!"),
-            l("Let me check on my inventory book..."),
+            l("Black iron... That is a very specific request that you have for me!"),
+            l("Let me check in my inventory book..."),
             l("..."),
             l("Yes, I have some! \"5x Black Iron Ingots\""),
             l("Is this for you or somebody else? Because you need to be registered to obtain these materials.");
@@ -38,10 +38,10 @@
                 break;
             case 2:
                 speech 1,
-                    l("Chelios... He is part of the blacksmith house, is not he?"),
+                    l("Chelios... He is part of the blacksmith house, is he not?"),
                     l("Since Don settled in Artis he and his band refused to register to the Merchant Guild."),
-                    l("I will close my eyes for once, but only because it is your first time asking for something!"),
-                    l("Sometimes a good merchant need to reach out first. It's on the house, give Chelios my regards!");
+                    l("I will close my eyes for once, but only because it's your first time asking for something!"),
+                    l("Sometimes a good merchant needs to reach out first. It's on the house, give Chelios my regards!");
                 emotion 7;
                 break;
         }
@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@
     function first_visit {
         speech 4,
             l("Welcome!"),
-            l("My name is Lloyd, I am a representant of the Merchant Guild of Artis.");
+            l("My name is Lloyd, I am a representative of the Merchant Guild of Artis.");
 
         select (l("My name is @@...", strcharinfo(0)));
 
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@
             l("\"@@\", I like this name!", strcharinfo(0)),
             l("Oh, wait a second...");
         narrator 4,
-            l("Lloyd is searching something on his book.");
+            l("Lloyd is searching something in his book.");
         speech 4,
             l("I see."),
             l("You are new around here, right?");
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@
                 if (Zeny < .@price)
                 {
                     speech 4,
-                        l("You do not seem to have enough money on yourself, come back later!");
+                        l("You do not seem to have enough money, come back later!");
                 }
                 else
                 {
@@ -125,16 +125,16 @@
 
     function paper_to_deliver {
         speech 5,
-            l("Now that you bring up that topic, that remind me of something..."),
-            l("Not later than today there was this young seller named Fexil that passed by here."),
-            l("He asked to lend some money and a place to open his store, I think that he asked for a place on the merchant square on the south-west of the city..."),
+            l("Now that you bring up that topic, that reminds me of something..."),
+            l("Earlier today there was this young seller named Fexil that passed by here."),
+            l("He asked to lend some money and a place to open his store, I think that he asked for a place on the merchant squares on the south-west of the city..."),
             l("Anyway, he forgot his permit when he left the building."),
             l("Could you bring it to him?");
 
         do
         {
             .@q = select (l("Ok, I will bring it to him."),
-                          l("I need more informations first."),
+                          l("I need more information first."),
                           l("I don't have the time."));
             switch (.@q)
             {
@@ -145,7 +145,7 @@
                     break;
                 case 2:
                     speech 5,
-                        l("You should look a seller named Fexil around the merchant square."),
+                        l("You should look for a seller named Fexil around the merchant square."),
                         l("Ask other merchants, they might know where he is.");
                     break;
                 case 3:
@@ -247,10 +247,10 @@
         .@enora = getq (ArtisQuests_Enora);
 
         menuint rif (.@enora == 2, l("I'm searching some black iron ingots.")), 0,
-                l("I would like to deposit some item."), 1,
-                l("I would like to manage my money."), 2,
+                l("I would like to store some items."), 1,
+                l("I would like to deposit some money."), 2,
                 l("What is this guild for?"), 3,
-                l("The guild has any work for me?"), 4,
+                l("Does the guild has any work for me right now?"), 4,
                 l("Bye."), 5;
 
         switch (@menuret)
diff --git a/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt b/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
index e073d990..42fb137a 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-2/moon.txt
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@
     if (.@q < 2)
     {
         mesn "Narrator";
-        mes col(l("You see a young elven girl, with a grimace of pain on her face."), 9);
+        mes col(l("You see a young elven girl, with a strong sense of pain in her face."), 9);
         next;
     }
     else
@@ -110,7 +110,7 @@ L_Story:
     next;
     mesq l("I didn't notice that a Pikpik was in my way, and when I stepped on it, my foot was full of spikes.");
     next;
-    mesq l("Luckily the beach is nearby, and somehow I could come home.");
+    mesq l("Luckily the beach is nearby, and somehow I made my way home.");
     next;
     mesq l("Please bring me some @@ so I can pull out these spikes from my foot.", getitemlink("CrocClaw"));
     next;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt b/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
index abb1b63f..1296b097 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-21/julia.txt
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ L_Menu:
         l("Is it possible to go back to the island?"), L_Island,
         l("Could you explain to me where I am?"), L_WhereIam,
         l("What happened to me?"), L_What,
-        l("Can I read these rules again?"), L_Rules,
+        l("Can I read the rules again?"), L_Rules,
         l("Nothing, sorry."), L_Quit;
 
 L_YNMenu:
@@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ L_What:
 L_Rules:
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Of course, they are on the left wall, go have a look at them.");
+    mesq l("Of course, they are on the left wall. Go have a look at them.");
     next;
     mesq l("Do you have any other questions for me?");
     next;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt b/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
index cdad1663..6e906446 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/alige.txt
@@ -110,9 +110,9 @@ L_ExplainHiding:
     setcamnpc;
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("No, I can't. I won't! All is I wanted was to travel across the seas for fun, growl... sniff. And in this chink in the wall, as you can see, I have lots of fun.");
+    mesq l("No, I can't. I won't! All I wanted was to travel across the seas for fun, growl... sniff. And in this chink in the wall, as you can see, I have lots of fun.");
     next;
-    mesq l("Oh... um... actually... all is I wanted was to get to Artis. Err... but I didn't, ah, have enough money to pay for the ferry!");
+    mesq l("Oh... um... actually... all I wanted was to get to Artis. Err... but I didn't, ah, have enough money to pay for the ferry!");
     next;
     mesq l("Please don't tell people you saw me. I don't want to be decapitated or get thrown into the sea as food for sharks, or get my hair mussed!");
     next;
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@ L_AboutReward:
 L_Accept:
     menu
         l("Understood, I will help you."), L_FirstAccepted,
-        l("We arrived to Artis today."), L_Artis,
+        l("We arrived in Artis today."), L_Artis,
         l("I think I should report you to the crew members."), -;
 
     setcamnpc;
@@ -144,7 +144,7 @@ L_Artis:
     setcamnpc;
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Of course, so why do I still see plain sea from the porthole?");
+    mesq l("Of course, so why do I still see open sea from the porthole?");
     next;
     mesq l("I wonder who is in delarium now...");
     next;
@@ -232,7 +232,7 @@ L_NoReward:
 L_Drunk:
     setcamnpc;
     speech 5,
-        l("I asked for food but... *hips* Ah, that'll do so!");
+        l("I asked for food but... *hips* Ah, that'll do nicely!");
     restorecam;
 
     goto L_GiveFood;
@@ -283,7 +283,7 @@ L_IntroMenu:
         l("Yes."), L_GiveFood,
         l("Where can I find some food?"), L_FindFood,
         l("Why are you hiding?") + " " + l("Why don't you come out?"), L_ExplainHiding,
-        l("We arrived to Artis today."), L_Artis,
+        l("We arrived in Artis today."), L_Artis,
         l("I think I should report you to the crew members."), -;
 
     setcamnpc;
@@ -299,7 +299,7 @@ L_FindFood:
     next;
     mesq l("I'd like to catch one of them, but they fly away when I try.");
     next;
-    mesq l("Walkig around a bit, it'll be easy for you to catch one, I bet. Impale one of them for me please.");
+    mesq l("Walking around a bit, it'll be easy for you to catch one, I bet. Impale one of them for me please.");
     next;
     restorecam;
     mesn "Narrator";
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/note.txt b/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
index 9abaeb18..03e79769 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/note.txt
@@ -25,9 +25,9 @@ L_Content:
     mes l("Don't worry sister, I didn't forget you");
     next;
 
-    mes l("I hope to come back at home when days will be better");
-    mes l("And when we will got enought money to don't depend of anybody");
+    mes l("I hope to come back home when the days are better");
+    mes l("And when we have enough money to support ourselves and not depend on anybody");
 
-    mes l("Dearly yours, Dan") + "\"";
+    mes l("Sincerely yours, Dan") + "\"";
     close;
 }
diff --git a/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt b/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
index 5cfe02f5..53b8417e 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-22/peter.txt
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ OnReturnFail:
 OnReturnWin:
     .@peter = getq(ShipQuests_Peter);
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Thanks again for helping me. Drats these rattos for infesting our fair vessal! They are a permanent problem; so you can always be sure that your help with the extermination, to keep their numbers under control, is very welcome indeed. But the situation is, that I can give you a reward only the one time.");
+    mesq l("Thanks again for helping me. Drats these rattos for infesting our fair vessal! They are a permanent problem; so you can always be sure that your help with the extermination will be greatly appreciated, to keep their numbers under control, is very welcome indeed. unfortunately, I can give you a reward only the one time.");
     next;
 
     if (.@peter == 3 || .@peter == 4)
diff --git a/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt b/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
index 2b334d7c..e88b5848 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-24/nard.txt
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
 
     speech 5,
         l("We just returned from a long journey and Artis is a good city to rest and to conclude our exchange."),
-        l("I think that we will stay in port for a great time, though, if you want to visit some near place we could take you there."),
+        l("I think that we will stay in port for a great time, though, if you want to visit some nearby we could take you there."),
         l("Do you want to go somewhere?");
 
     switch (select(l("Lost Island."),
@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@
 L_Lost :
     mes "";
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Julia make appeal the Legion of Aemil to search you, exit the ship and you should see your escort!");
+    mesq l("Julia made an appeal to the Legion of Aemil to get in touch with you, exit the ship and you should see your escort!");
     next;
 
     closedialog;
diff --git a/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt b/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
index 45a45db8..6538eeb6 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-26/ivan.txt
@@ -1,3 +1,4 @@
+
 // Evol scripts.
 // Author:
 //    Reid
@@ -10,13 +11,13 @@
         speech 5,
             l("I am an alchemist, I bear the name of Ivan."),
             l("I work under the protection and the supervision of the Legion of Aemil."),
-            l("Alchemical studies are prohibited in every cities of the Archipelagos, do not dare to practice in a public zone!");
+            l("Alchemical studies are prohibited in every city of the Archipelagos, do not dare to practice it in a public zone!");
 
         return;
     }
 
     function enora_quest {
-        speech 5, l("How many? What kind? I can produce two dozen of box per day.");
+        speech 5, l("How many? What kind? I can produce two dozen boxes per day.");
 
         select (l("5 Pibberies Infusion."));
 
@@ -27,7 +28,7 @@
         select (l("You missunderstood, it's 5 potions."));
 
         speech 5,
-            l("Why the Legion would request my help for only 5 potions?"),
+            l("Why would the Legion request my help for only 5 potions?"),
             l("Is this some kind of joke?!");
 
         switch (select (l("Enora needs them."),
diff --git a/npc/001-2-27/don.txt b/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
index 17c50eee..fddde8a5 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-27/don.txt
@@ -17,12 +17,12 @@
     function card_explanation {
         speech 5,
             l("There are two different kinds of card, the first changes the style of your clothes, the second changes their stats."),
-            l("I am not an expert of the first kind, but I know what I am talking about for the second."),
+            l("I am not an expert of the first kind, but I know what I am talking about when it comes to improving equipment"),
             l("A stat card works on different pieces of equipment."),
-            l("Each equipment has a predefined slot number."),
-            l("Each cards improve your gear by a ratio or a fixed number on a predefined stat."),
-            l("Like, a defensive mythril card can be used on any mythril equipment, and it will improve of 5% the defense of the latter."),
-            l("You just have to select it, you choose on which piece of equipment you want to use it, and you are done.");
+            l("Each piece of equipment has a predefined slot number."),
+            l("Each card improves your gear by a ratio or a fixed number on a predefined stat."),
+            l("Like, a defensive mythril card can be used on any mythril equipment, and it will improve the defense by 5% of the latter."),
+            l("You just have to select the card, then you choose which piece of equipment you want to use it on, and you are done.");
         return;
     }
 
@@ -34,16 +34,16 @@
         select (l("What about Chelios?"));
 
         speech 5,
-            l("Chelios was stubborn in his youth, he could not stop to annoy me with his questions while I was working at the forge."),
+            l("Chelios was stubborn in his youth, he never stopped annoying me with his questions while I was working at the forge."),
             l("He did not change while growing up, I repeatedly asked him to leave the forge but in the end he installed himself in front of it..."),
-            l("He is mature and he rarely ask questions so I am fine. I can not stand the sight of a whinger anyway.");
+            l("He is mature and he rarely ask questions so I am fine. I can not stand the sight of a whiner anyway.");
         return;
     }
 
     function good_blacksmith {
         speech 5,
-            l("I do not like to brag about it but you will not find any better blacksmith on the whole island."),
-            l("If you need somebody to craft a weapon or a plate from a diagrams I am the one that you need.");
+            l("I do not like to brag about it but you won't find a better blacksmith on the whole island."),
+            l("If you need somebody to craft a weapon or a plate from diagrams I am the one that you need.");
 
         switch (select (l("Can I craft them myself?"),
                         l("Ok.")))
diff --git a/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt b/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
index 641fd93b..c447f7e3 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-27/kaylo.txt
@@ -22,11 +22,11 @@
             speech 5,
                 l("I used a card to improve my clothes."),
                 l("There're two different kinds of card, the first changes the style of your clothes, the second changes their stats."),
-                l("You should discuss with Don and Calypsan if you want to learn more about it, they are master on this area!");
+                l("You should discuss with Don and Calypsan if you want to learn more about it, they are masters on this area!");
             break;
         case 3:
             speech 5,
-                l("You are on the Blacksmith's house, by Jove!"),
+                l("You are in the Blacksmith's house, by Jove!"),
                 l("Don is a renowned blacksmith throughout Andorra it's crazy that you don't know about him.");
             break;
         case 4:
diff --git a/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt b/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
index 753b285b..9f6d7ad6 100644
--- a/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
+++ b/npc/001-2-29/edouard.txt
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@
         speech 12,
             l("I am new in this town, just like you are."),
             l("I came here, looking for a better life."),
-            l("I still didn't find a cheap building to open my own business, so for now I stay in this inn."),
+            l("I still didn't find a cheap building to open my own business, so for now I will stay in this inn."),
             l("I'm a barber, you see. I can change your hair style or color to your liking.");
 
         Edouard_StoryTold = 1;