Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing

All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.

1 files changed, 17 insertions, 17 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt b/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt
index 340f2959..663d6c07 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt
@@ -27,25 +27,25 @@
     if (OrumQuest > 15) goto L_Mistrust;
 
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"You! You're really more insistent than it's good for you...\"";
+    mes "\"You! You really are far too persistent to know what is good for you!\"";
     mes "He turns towards Orum.";
     next;
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"It seems your ridiculous Guarding Spirit failed his task.";
-    mes "Deal with this, we really can't afford more of this distractions.\"";
+    mes "\"It seems your ridiculous Guarding Spirit has failed at his task.";
+    mes "Deal with this. We cannot afford any more of these distractions.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Mistrust:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"So you say you want to help us? You don't look very competent.";
-    mes "Also, I don't see what motivates you to do this.\"";
+    mes "\"So, you say you want to help us? You do not look very competent.";
+    mes "Also, I do not see what motivation you have to help.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Show your usefulness, then I might take you serious.\"";
+    mes "\"Demonstrate your worth and I might take you seriously.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Flower1:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"You placed the first flower. I'm surprised, I didn't expect you to actually stay and be useful.\"";
+    mes "\"You placed the first flower. Why, I am surprised! I did not expect you to actually stay and become useful.\"";
     goto L_Close;
     // TODO: enable this when adding the spells
     // also add logic to the other label's dialogs/eventually change their dialog to fit better
@@ -60,8 +60,8 @@ L_Flower1:
     if (!@killed_mouboo && !@cut_tree)
         goto L_Undecided;
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"Hm. Actually, I could do that. You seem to have some potential.";
-    mes "But first go on with the next summoning artifact.\"";
+    mes "\"Hmm. I suppose I could do that. You seem to have some potential.";
+    mes "First, proceed with the next summoning artifact.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Flower2:
@@ -71,18 +71,18 @@ L_Flower2:
 
 L_Flower3:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"I saw that you helped to create the third flower which you just placed. Good.\"";
+    mes "\"I saw that you helped to create and place the third flower. Good.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Flower4:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"We're very close to reach our goal, now that you've placed the fourth flower. Keep it up.\"";
+    mes "\"Now that you have placed the fourth flower, we are very close to reaching our goal. Keep it up.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Flower5:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"Hahaha, excellent. You handled the creation of our pentagram very well. I'll keep that in mind.";
-    mes "I advised Orum to give you some reward, did you already talk to him?\"";
+    mes "\"Hahaha, excellent. You handled the creation of our pentagram very well. I will be keeping that in mind.";
+    mes "I have advised Orum to give you a reward. Go now and speak with him.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Spells:
@@ -93,14 +93,14 @@ L_Spells:
 
 L_Undecided:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"Well. I could. But I'm not sure you're trustworthy.\"";
+    mes "\"Well, I could. However, I am not sure you are all that trustworthy.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"How can I know you're not going to run to Sagatha with what I'd teach you?\"";
+    mes "\"How do I know you will not run off to Sagatha with what I would be teaching you?\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Sagatha:
     mes "[Waric]";
-    mes "\"You're already a student of Sagatha. I won't teach you anything.\"";
+    mes "\"You are already a student of Sagatha. I will not teach you anything!\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close:
@@ -142,4 +142,4 @@ L_Close:
 OnInit:
     if (!debug)
         disablenpc "DebugFlowerP";
-}
+}
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