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diff --git a/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/golbanez.txt b/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/golbanez.txt
index 301d0a8f..980afcf6 100644
--- a/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/golbanez.txt
+++ b/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/golbanez.txt
@@ -65,15 +65,15 @@
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"Fine.\"";
next;
- mes "\"This place was an usual inn many many of your years ago. I found it by chance and it became one of my favorite playgrounds ever.\"";
+ mes "\"This place was a usual inn many many of your years ago. I found it by chance and it became one of my favorite playgrounds ever.\"";
next;
mes "Golbanez laughs in a way which really gives you the creeps.";
next;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"Unfortunaly - it got destroyed. So I took the memories of the dead and recreated this place.\"";
+ mes "\"Unfortunately - it got destroyed. So I took the memories of the dead and recreated this place.\"";
menu
- "What do you mean with playground?",-,
- "Recreated? What do you mean with that?",-;
+ "What do you mean by 'playground?'",-,
+ "Recreated? What do you mean by that?",-;
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"As I said, you don't understand. You start to bore me. Leave.\"";
@@ -103,20 +103,20 @@ L_Memory:
L_Detective:
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"Watching you digging in this dirty little love story of that foolish humans was certainly amusing so far.\"";
+ mes "\"Watching you digging in this dirty little love story of those foolish humans has certainly been amusing so far.\"";
next;
- mes "\"I can show you all their memories, would you like that?\"";
+ mes "\"I can show you all their memories. Would you like that?\"";
next;
mes "\"The only thing you'd have to do is promise me your soul.\"";
menu
"No!",-,
"That's too expensive. Make another offer.",-,
"My soul?!",-;
- mes "Golbanez giggles, which looks strange at an intimidating being as he is.";
+ mes "Golbanez giggles, which looks strange on such an intimidating being as he is.";
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"You should have seen your face. Really, mortals can be so funny.\"";
next;
- mes "\"Ok, I'll show you the birdbrained womens memories, if you bring me " + @ROTTENRAGS_AMOUNT + " rotten rags. And an orange cake.\"";
+ mes "\"Ok, I'll show you the birdbrained womans memories if you bring me " + @ROTTENRAGS_AMOUNT + " rotten rags. And an orange cake.\"";
set @state, 2;
callsub S_Update_Mask;
close;
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@ L_Reid:
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"Very nice. I will show you the womans memories of that night. Come closer.\"";
next;
- mes "\"You're hesitating but then take a step towards Golbanez. He grabs your head with his claw like fingers.\"";
+ mes "\"You're hesitating but then take a step towards Golbanez. He grabs your head with his claw-like fingers.\"";
next;
callsub S_Reidsmem;
set @state, 3;
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ L_Reid:
mes "Golbanez takes an amused look at you.";
next;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"I'll explain the deal to you. Once you paid for a memory, you can come and see it again as often as you like. And I collect whatever memory I want to. Mortals can be very amusing.\"";
+ mes "\"I'll explain the deal to you. Once you have paid for a memory, you can come and see it again as often as you like. And I collect whatever memory I want to. Mortals can be very amusing.\"";
next;
mes "\"I have more memories you might want to see. Bring me "+ @UNDEADEAR_AMOUNT + " undead ears. And a chocolate cake.\"";
close;
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ L_Hamond:
if (countitem("UndeadEar") < @UNDEADEAR_AMOUNT)
menu
"I want to see Reids memory again.",L_R_Again,
- "What will you do with it?",L_Why_Stuff,
+ "What will you do with them?",L_Why_Stuff,
"Not yet.",L_Close;
menu
"I want to see Reids memory again.",L_R_Again,
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@ L_Savaric:
"I want to see Reids memory again.",L_R_Again,
"I want to see Hamonds memory again.",L_H_Again,
"I really wonder what you do with the stuff I bring you.",L_Why_Stuff,
- "It's hard to get. I'm still working on that.",L_Close;
+ "They're hard to get. I'm still working on that.",L_Close;
menu
"I want to see Reids memory again.",L_R_Again,
"I want to see Hamonds memory again.",L_H_Again,
@@ -254,7 +254,7 @@ L_Negotiate:
"Nevermind.",L_Close;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"Savarics soul, yes. It is a pretty nice soul, you know. From a mage, no, even better, from a loving mage. It is valuable.\"";
+ mes "\"Savarics soul, yes. It is a pretty nice soul, you know. From a mage... no, even better... from a loving mage. It is valuable.\"";
next;
mes "\"Why do you think it would be easy to get it back? Do you have anything of equal worth to offer?\"";
next;
@@ -285,7 +285,7 @@ L_Soul_Try:
set @soul, rand(50);
if (@soul == 0) goto L_Soul_Success;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"No, this one isn't as powerful as the mage ones. Bring me another one of them.\"";
+ mes "\"No, this one isn't as powerful as the mage one. Bring me another one of them.\"";
goto L_Soul_Try;
L_Soul_Success:
@@ -312,7 +312,7 @@ L_Cake:
L_S_Again:
callsub S_Savaricsmem;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"What a fool he was even for a human.\"";
+ mes "\"What a fool he was, even for a human.\"";
close;
L_R_Again:
@@ -335,7 +335,7 @@ L_Horns:
L_Why_Stuff:
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"That is not for your concern.\"";
+ mes "\"That is not your concern.\"";
close;
L_Betray:
@@ -353,9 +353,9 @@ L_Close:
S_Reidsmem:
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"I'll send her memories into your brain now. Don't collapse or do something similar foolish.\"";
+ mes "\"I'll send her memories into your brain now. Don't collapse or do something similarly foolish.\"";
next;
- mes "Everything turns black. Then, slowly, you see something. You're standing outside and watch a alive-looking Hamond ride away on a carriage drawn by a mouboo.\"";
+ mes "Everything turns black. Then, slowly, you see something. You're standing outside and watch an alive-looking Hamond ride away on a carriage drawn by a mouboo.\"";
next;
mes "\"You turn back and enter a nice looking building. It seems to be the inn.";
next;
@@ -363,9 +363,9 @@ S_Reidsmem:
next;
mes "You-Reid walks up the stairs and stops in front of the door you recognize as Savarics room. You get a twisted feeling, something between desire, guilt and despair.";
next;
- mes "It seems, you're not only seeing Reids memories but also feel them!";
+ mes "It seems you're not only seeing Reids memories but also feeling them!";
next;
- mes "Reid turns away from Savarics door and walks to her rooms quickly. It seems, she is shivering. You feel her heart pounding.";
+ mes "Reid turns away from Savarics door and walks to her rooms quickly. She is shivering. You feel her heart pounding.";
next;
mes "She enters the room and pulls the red dress you already know from her ghost out of a chest and changes her clothes. Her heart is pounding even faster.";
next;
@@ -391,7 +391,7 @@ S_Reidsmem:
next;
mes "Savaric puts his arms around Reid and lead her to the bed. You feel a flush of sexual arousal.";
next;
- mes "He starts to stroke Reids face with his lips while his hands streak her dress from her shoulders.";
+ mes "He starts to caress Reids face with his lips while his hands slip her dress from her shoulders.";
next;
mes "Reids feelings are like a firestorm and it's hard for you to concentrate on what is happening.";
next;
@@ -400,66 +400,66 @@ S_Reidsmem:
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"I told you not to collapse!\"";
next;
- mes "\"It seems, Reids feelings were to strong for you to stand against it.\"";
+ mes "\"It seems Reids feelings were too strong for you to stand against it.\"";
next;
mes "Golbanez grins.";
next;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"But I guess you can imagine the following.\"";
+ mes "\"But I guess you can imagine what followed.\"";
next;
return;
S_Hamondsmem:
- mes "The darkness vanishes and you see the back of a mouboo pulling the carriage you're sitting on. Or better to say, Hamond was sitting on.";
+ mes "The darkness vanishes and you see the back of a mouboo pulling the carriage you're sitting on. Or better to say, Hamond is sitting on.";
next;
mes "You feel very very nervous and worried.";
next;
mes "[Hamond]";
mes "\"I shouln't leave her alone with that debaucher. But she loves me. She won't give in to such a dandy. I believe in her. I trust her.\"";
next;
- mes "The carriage reaches a river, but it seems the bridge is damaged. A group of people is standing at the riverside. There is one little boat, taking over the persons one after another.";
+ mes "The carriage reaches a river, but it seems the bridge is damaged. A group of people is standing at the riverside. There is one little boat, taking over the people one by one.";
next;
- mes "You feel a great relieve growing in Hamonds chest.";
+ mes "You feel a great surge of relief growing in Hamonds chest.";
next;
- mes "He shakes his and let his carriage turn around. Obviously this is a great excuse for him to return to Reid at once.";
+ mes "He shakes the reins and gets his carriage turned around. Obviously this is a great excuse for him to return to Reid at once.";
next;
- mes "When he returns to the inn the sunset is already near. He tells some menial to take care of the mouboo and the carriage and hasts up the stairs heading to his and Reids rooms, you feel his heart pounding.";
+ mes "When he returns to the inn, sunset is already near. He tells the stableboy to take care of the mouboo and carriage, then rushes up the stairs heading to his and Reids rooms. You can feel his heart pounding.";
next;
- mes "He rips the door open and the room is empty. A cold feeling grows in his chest. He turn around and sees Reid standing in front of him, wearing her best dress. The red one which makes her look so beautiful - you feel a sting in Hamonds heart.";
+ mes "He rips the door open and the room is empty. A cold feeling grows in his chest. He turns around and sees Reid standing in front of him, wearing her best dress. The red one which makes her look so beautiful - you feel a sharp sting in Hamonds heart.";
next;
- mes "The dress is crumpled and seems to be put on in a haste, her hair is a total chaos on her head.";
+ mes "The dress is crumpled and seems to be put on in haste, her hair is in total chaos on her head.";
next;
mes "[Reid]";
mes "\"Hamond! What are you doing here? Why are you already back?\"";
next;
- mes "You feel rage growing in Hamond.";
+ mes "You feel a burning rage growing in Hamond.";
mes "[Hamond]";
- mes "\"You're not happy to see me, are you? Do you prefer me running this inn for you but but not bother you with your cockish behavior?!\"";
+ mes "\"You're not happy to see me, are you? Do you prefer me running this inn for you but not bother you with your cockish behavior?!\"";
next;
- mes "The shocked and painful but guilty look on Reids face fills Hamond with a strange mixture of pain and gratisfication.";
+ mes "The shocked and painful but guilty look on Reids face fills Hamond with a strange mixture of pain and gratification.";
next;
- mes "He grabs her arm, pulls her into the room and thunk the door shut behind them. You see a fearful look on Reids face.";
+ mes "He grabs her arm, pulls her into the room and slams the door shut behind them. You see a fearful look on Reids face.";
next;
mes "[Reid]";
mes "\"Hamond! Please, calm down!\"";
next;
- mes "The feeling of broken trust and disappoinment seems to drive you crazy.";
+ mes "The feeling of broken trust and disappoinment seems to drive you..Hamond..crazy.";
next;
- mes "\"Hamond slaps her face.\"";
+ mes "Hamond slaps her across the face.";
next;
mes "[Hamond]";
mes "\"You are MY WIFE! I'll teach you what this means!\"";
next;
- mes "As Hamond grabs Reid rudely and hold her tight, you can smell her sweat and fear, but under that smell of another man! Hamonds sight does red.";
+ mes "As Hamond grabs Reid roughly and holds her tight, you can smell her sweat and fear, but under that is the smell of another man! Hamonds vision goes red.";
next;
mes "[Hamond]";
mes "\"You dirty slut! I did everything for you!\"";
next;
- mes "Reid is struggling wild to get rid of Hamonds hold. She is surprisingly strong and both are falling against the table.";
+ mes "Reid is struggling wildly to get out of Hamonds hold. She is surprisingly strong and both are falling against the table.";
next;
- mes "The next you see is a teapot smashing in Hamonds face. He stumbles back.";
+ mes "The next thing you see is a teapot smashing into Hamonds face. He stumbles back.";
next;
- mes "You see Reid running to the door, where she has a look back. Then she runs out of the room.";
+ mes "You see Reid running to the door, where she pauses and has a look back. Then she runs out of the room.";
next;
mes "\"Her face was drowned with tears, her lips bloody and her eye was already turning black.\"";
next;
@@ -478,21 +478,21 @@ S_Savaricsmem:
next;
mes "Then you hear steps outside the room. Savaric turns to the door quickly, then Reid breaks into the room.";
next;
- mes "She looks totally tattered, her dress is riven, her lips are bleeding, she has a black eye and she is sobbing uncontrolled. It takes Savaric less than a second to reach her and put his arms around her carefully.";
+ mes "She looks totally tattered, her dress is ripped, her lips are bleeding, she has a black eye and she is sobbing uncontrollably. It takes Savaric less than a second to reach her and put his arms around her carefully.";
next;
- mes "You feel a deep and cold anger.";
+ mes "You feel a deep, cold anger.";
next;
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"Reid, my love, what did he do to you? Please come and lay down.\"";
next;
- mes "Savaric leads Reid to his bed and covers her caring. Then he holds and dandle her until she falls asleep. You notice Savaric is only wearing his underpants.";
+ mes "Savaric leads Reid to his bed and covers her gently. Then he holds and rocks her until she falls asleep. You notice Savaric is only wearing his underpants.";
next;
mes "After Reids breathing has calmed down and her oppressed face looks peaceful again, he stands up and his cold burning anger comes back.";
next;
mes "[Savaric]";
- mes "\"I won't let him go away with that!\"";
+ mes "\"I won't let him get away with that!\"";
next;
- mes "Savaric pulls some things out of a chest and puts them on the table. He lights some candles and begins to mix together some powders and fluids. You feel concentration, but also a great anger which detains you from having a straight thought.";
+ mes "Savaric pulls some things out of a chest and puts them on the table. He lights some candles and begins to mix together some powders and fluids. You feel his concentration, but also a great anger which restrains you from having a straight thought.";
next;
mes "Savaric seems to be ready with his magic ingredients and takes what he mixed together. You feel raising power inside of you. The moment you think you can't stand it anymore, the tension disappears and a purple light fills the room for a moment.";
next;
@@ -501,7 +501,7 @@ S_Savaricsmem:
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"Mortal! It was very rude of you to force me to this place with that spell - are you aware of the power you are playing around with?!\"";
next;
- mes "Fear is raising inside of you, but also excitement and a feeling of power.";
+ mes "Fear is rising inside of you, but also excitement and a feeling of power.";
next;
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"I called you to get rid of the person who did this to this adorable woman.\"";
@@ -510,7 +510,7 @@ S_Savaricsmem:
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"Tell me your charge.\"";
next;
- mes "Golbanez behavior changes immediatly and he seems much friendlier.";
+ mes "Golbanez' behavior changes immediately and he suddenly seems much friendlier.";
next;
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"Ah, you're offering me a deal. That's something else. Let me see. I can free her from all pain and anything or anyone causing her trouble.\"";
@@ -519,11 +519,11 @@ S_Savaricsmem:
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"Yes. That's what I want. I want her to be safe from any harm.\"";
next;
- mes "Golbanez face turns into a smile.";
+ mes "Golbanez' face turns into a smile.";
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"This requires some effort. It will have a remarkable price. I want your soul in exchange.\"";
next;
- mes "The feeling of power disappears and is replaced with unsureness.";
+ mes "The feeling of power disappears and is replaced with uncertainty.";
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"My - soul? Can't it be something else?\"";
next;
@@ -534,32 +534,32 @@ S_Savaricsmem:
mes "[Golbanez]";
mes "\"So be it. Take my soul and prevent Reid from feeling pain ever again.\"";
next;
- mes "Golbanez smile changes to an ugly grin of malice. He reaches out to Savaric and seems to pull something out of him. Suddenly, you feel very weak and empty.";
+ mes "Golbanez' smile changes to an ugly grin of malice. He reaches out to Savaric and seems to pull something out of him. Suddenly, you feel very weak and empty.";
next;
- mes "In the next moment, you're laying on the ground and see Golbanez raising his arms. You sense a unbelievable magic force - what is he doing?";
+ mes "In the next moment, you're laying on the ground and see Golbanez raising his arms. You sense an unbelievable magic force - what is he doing?";
next;
- mes "Undeads are entring the room and one of them steps to the bed and breaks Reid neck with a quick movement. A dark and black feeling of despair is rising inside of you.";
+ mes "Undeads are entering the room and one of them steps to the bed and breaks Reid neck with a quick movement. A dark and black feeling of despair is rising inside of you.";
next;
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"NO!! What are you doing?\"";
next;
mes "[Golbanez]";
- mes "\"She will never feel any harm anymore. Just as everyone else in this inn - beside of you, foolish mortal.\"";
+ mes "\"She will never feel any harm anymore. Just like everyone else in this inn - besides you, foolish mortal.\"";
next;
mes "Golbanez leaves the room and you feel Savaric giving in to his pain. He is laying on the floor and tries to understand what he did.";
next;
- mes "After some moments you were only feeling Savarics suffering he finally manages to stand up again. He can't stand to see Reids dead body anymore and stumbles out of the room.";
+ mes "After a few moments of only feeling Savarics suffering, he finally manages to stand up again. He can't stand to see Reids dead body anymore and stumbles out of the room.";
next;
- mes "But what you can see in the rest of the inn isn't capable to ease the suffer you're feeling. The undeads have slaughtered every person in the inn, leaving only Savaric alive.";
+ mes "But what you can see in the rest of the inn isn't able to ease the suffering you're feeling. The undeads have slaughtered every person in the inn, leaving only Savaric alive.";
next;
- mes "Savaric seems stunned by shock. He returns to his room and knees in front of the bed taking Reids hand.";
+ mes "Savaric seems stunned by shock. He slowly returns to his room and kneels in front of the bed, taking Reids hand.";
next;
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"Reid - I'm so sorry. My haughtiness was greater than my skills.\"";
next;
- mes "The dumb feeling gives way to a new feeling of determination.";
+ mes "The numb feeling gives way to a new feeling of determination.";
next;
- mes "Savaric pulls a rope out of his chest.";
+ mes "Savaric pulls a rope out of the chest beside the bed.";
mes "[Savaric]";
mes "\"Now there's only one thing left for me to do.\"";
next;