Language polish project cont'd.

1 files changed, 12 insertions, 12 deletions

diff --git a/npc/021-2_Tulimshar/bakery.txt b/npc/021-2_Tulimshar/bakery.txt
index 2fb5d110..18219a82 100644
--- a/npc/021-2_Tulimshar/bakery.txt
+++ b/npc/021-2_Tulimshar/bakery.txt
@@ -18,19 +18,19 @@ L_lace_chococake:
 
         menu
 		"Thanks!  Let me have a look around...", L_end,
-                "Can you put this potion into a chocolate cake?", -,
+                "Can you put this potion into a [Chocolate Cake]?", -,
 		"Goodbye!", L_end;
 
 	mes "[Riskim]";
-        mes "As you show him the potion, Riskim leans back, away from it.";
+        mes "As you show Riskim the potion, he leans back, away from it.";
         mes "\"Ooooh, I remember that smell...\"";
         mes "\"Elanore's Mopox potion, right?  She made me drink that, too...\"";
         mes "He chuckles.";
-        mes "\"Yes, well, you do want to hide that.\"";
+        mes "\"Yes, well, you do want to hide that somehow.\"";
         next;
 
 	mes "[Riskim]";
-        mes "\"We'll need extra chocolate for that one.  If you can give me ten pieces of chocolate and that potion, plus 400 GP, I will bake you a special chocolate cake that hides the taste.\"";
+        mes "\"We'll need extra chocolate for that one.  If you can give me ten pieces of chocolate and that potion, plus 400 GP, I will bake you a special [Chocolate Cake] that hides the taste.\"";
         next;
 
         menu
@@ -50,9 +50,9 @@ L_lace_chococake:
         set zeny, zeny - 400;
 
 	mes "[Riskim]";
-        mes "\"Please have a seat.\"";
-        mes "You watch at Riskim melts the chocolate and stirs in the potion, then glazes a cake with it.";
-        mes "\"It's a bit more chocolaty than your average chocolate cake, of course...\"";
+        mes "\"Please have a seat!\"";
+        mes "You watch at Riskim melts the chocolate and stirs in the potion, then glazes a cake with the mixture.";
+        mes "\"It's a bit more chocolatey than your average chocolate cake, of course...\"";
         next;
 
 	mes "[Riskim]";
@@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ L_lacking_zeny:
 
 L_lacking_ingredients:
 	mes "[Riskim]";
-        mes "\"Sorry, but I need ten chocolate bars AND your cure potion for this.  Please come back later when you have everything.\"";
+        mes "\"Sorry, but I need ten [Chocolate Bar]s AND your cure potion for this.  Please come back later when you have everything.\"";
         close;
 
 L_lace_cupcake:
@@ -75,11 +75,11 @@ L_lace_cupcake:
 
         menu
 		"Thanks!  Let me have a look around...", L_end,
-                "Can you put this potion into an orange cupcake?", -,
+                "Can you put this potion into an [Orange Cupcake]?", -,
 		"Goodbye!", L_end;
 
 	mes "[Riskim]";
-        mes "\"Orange cupcakes?  Oh dear... I'm sorry, but I have a very bad orange allergy.\"";
+        mes "\"[Orange Cupcake]s?  Oh dear... I'm sorry, but I have a very bad orange allergy.\"";
         next;
 	mes "[Riskim]";
         mes "\"Perhaps the Chef at Dimond's Cove can help you?  We get all our cupcakes from him.\"";
@@ -110,12 +110,12 @@ L_end:
 // An old couple eating at the bakery
 021-2.gat,71,22,0	script	Rynoh	159,{
 	mes "[Rynoh]";
-	mes "\"It may be expensive, but it sure is good.\"";
+	mes "\"The cakes may be expensive, but they sure are delicious!\"";
 	close;
 }
 
 021-2.gat,73,22,0	script	Ontas	154,{
 	mes "[Ontas]";
-	mes "\"We come here every week. They have some of the best bread I've ever eaten.\"";
+	mes "\"We come here every week.  This place has some of the best bread I've ever eaten!\"";
 	close;
 }