Fixed Grammar/Dialogue issues in the Blue Sage Quest

1 files changed, 18 insertions, 19 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/048-2/helperChief.txt b/world/map/npc/048-2/helperChief.txt
index c8085a4c..c5d0ab12 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/048-2/helperChief.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/048-2/helperChief.txt
@@ -17,23 +17,23 @@
     if (@investigate == 0)
         goto L_Close;
     menu
-        "Peetu asked me to talk to you about his mischance.",-,
+        "Peetu asked me to talk to you about his mishap.",-,
         "Ok, see you.",L_Close;
 
-    mes "You explain about your conversation with Peetu, how he's blaming himself and his worries about loosing his job.";
+    mes "You tell him about your conversation with Peetu, how he's blaming himself and his worries about losing his job.";
     next;
-    mes "Oskari keeps silent a moment after you ended, pondering. Then he talks to you.";
+    mes "Oskari keeps silent a moment after you end, pondering. Then he talks to you.";
     mes "[Oskari]";
     mes "\"You know, Peetu is one of my most experienced and reliable employees. This whole situation is very disquieting, not to say suspicious.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Due to all the trouble I haven't had time to have a talk with him nor to make further investigations. You already showed some good knowledge of human nature by the way you calmed him down and talked to me.\"";
+    mes "\"Due to all the trouble, I haven't had time to have a talk with him nor to make further investigations. You already showed some good knowledge of human nature by the way you calmed him down and talked to me.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Would you be willing to talk with Peetu and the other helpers, doing some investigation about what actually happened?\"";
+    mes "\"Would you be willing to talk with Peetu and the other helpers, investigating what actually happened?\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"As someone who's not a member of our team you might be able to get a more unbiased view of the situation, beside of the fact that all of us are very busy with getting the situation under control again.\"";
+    mes "\"As someone who's not a member of our team you might be able to get a more unbiased view of the situation, besides the fact that all of us are very busy with getting the situation under control again.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"I suggest to start by talking to Peetu again to get a precise idea of his workflow and what he thinks that happened.";
-    mes "Oh, and please tell him that I'm not considering to fire him in the current situation. It might be needed to calm him down to get meaningful information.\"";
+    mes "Oh, and please tell him that I'm not considering firing him in the current situation. That might be needed to calm him down to get meaningful information.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"You should find out if someone observed something unusual during the time before the accident happened.\"";
     set @investigate, 2;
@@ -47,7 +47,7 @@ L_Investigate:
         menu
             "I'm still collecting information.",L_Close;
     next;
-    mes "You explain who you talked to, the helpers positive opinion about Peetu and what you find out about the suspicious visitor.";
+    mes "You explain who you talked to, the helpers positive opinion about Peetu and what you found out about the suspicious visitor.";
     mes "[Oskari]";
     mes "\"With a mask you say? This reminds me... wait a moment.\"";
     mes "He turns to his desk and searches through some papers.";
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ L_Investigate:
     mes "\"Mh... yes. It fits together.";
     mes "Listen, this is a letter from Chief Warrick from Santa's team. It seems they encountered some sabotaging during their preparations for the Christmas time, the letter mentions a masked person as well.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"And this are some reports about cases of unusal behaviour of native animals in various places of Kaizei that came to the Sages notice.\"";
+    mes "\"And there are some reports about cases of unusal behaviour of native animals in various places of Kaizei that came to the Sages notice.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"And now this accident in our house, also a person with a mask... and given the context of the recent frictions within the Sages...\"";
     mes "Oskari seems rather excited.";
@@ -65,13 +65,12 @@ L_Investigate:
     mes "\"I think you revealed some important connections. I need to notify Nikolai and the other Sages.\"";
     menu
         "I'm confused now.",-,
-        "What are you talking about?",-,
-        "Could you stop speaking in fractions?",-;
+        "What are you talking about?",-;
     mes "[Oskari]";
-    mes "\"I'm sorry. I think you deserve some explanation. You see, the Sages of Kaizei are a circle of wise wizards who work together for the prosperity of this continent.";
+    mes "\"I'm sorry. I think you deserve an explanation. You see, the Sages of Kaizei are a circle of wise wizards who work together for the prosperity of this continent.";
     mes "Recently there was some conflict among the Sages which caused one of the members to leave the circle. It's all very unfortunate.";
     next;
-    mes "\"However, taking all this different events into account, I came to the suspicion that there might be a connection. Of course we don't have evidence yet, so I don't want to be too clear. Well, I'll bring this to the Sages notice.\"";
+    mes "\"However, taking all these different events into account, I came to the suspicion that there might be a connection. Of course we don't have evidence yet, so I don't want to be too sure. Well, I'll bring this to the Sages' notice.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"You were a great help! I'll inform Nikolai about your involvement in clarifing this matter.\"";
     next;
@@ -96,13 +95,13 @@ L_GoodJob:
 
 L_Sages:
     mes "[Oskari]";
-    mes "\"Well, as I said the Sages are a circle of powerful wizards. There are twelve of them - eh, actually, now there are only elven of them.\"";
+    mes "\"Well, as I said the Sages are a circle of powerful wizards. There are twelve of them - eh, actually, now there are only eleven of them.\"";
     mes "He sighs.";
     next;
     mes "[Oskari]";
-    mes "\"However, they live in different places all over Kaizei, but meet sometimes to discuss about differents matters. They work hard for the prosperity of this continent, trying to improve the living conditions by both political work and magical researches, with the aid of their helpers.\"";
+    mes "\"However, they live in different places all over Kaizei, but they meet sometimes to discuss differents matters. They work hard for the prosperity of this continent, trying to improve the living conditions by both political work and magical researches, with the aid of their helpers.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"The politics on Kaizei are rather complicated, the Sages have great influence, but there are also other organziations and groups. Due to the harsh clima on this continent, villages or towns can be cut off the rest of the world for several weeks sometimes, so most of them tend to be rather independent.\"";
+    mes "\"The politics on Kaizei are rather complicated, the Sages have great influence, but there are also other organziations and groups. Due to the harsh climate on this continent, villages or towns can be cut off the rest of the world for several weeks sometimes, so most of them tend to be rather independent.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"Also there's the Order of Ice, an organization which represents the national interests of Kaizei in a rather narrow-minded way compared to the Sages.\"";
     goto L_Close;
@@ -111,11 +110,11 @@ L_Conflict:
     mes "[Oskari]";
     mes "\"Oh, I'm not sure if I should talk about that... It's a rather delicate situation.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Basically there was a disagreement between the Sages. Usually those things can be solved by discussion, but this time... things got rather personal and one of the members accused Santa to value his own interests over the general good.\"";
+    mes "\"Basically there was a disagreement between the Sages. Usually those things can be solved by discussion, but this time... things got rather personal and one of the members accused Santa of valuing his own interests over the general good.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"This is of course nonsense, Santa would never do that and it's more that the person accusing him could be suspected to act this way. The other Sages were on Santa's side and I fear this harsh rejection caused a lot of hurt feelings.\"";
+    mes "\"This of course is nonsense, Santa would never do that, and it's more that the person accusing him has been suspected to act this way. The other Sages were on Santa's side and I fear this harsh rejection caused a lot of painful feelings.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Personally I think that he was jealous about Santa's influence and supremacy position since quite a while. However, he took this as a reason to leave the Sages and based on our insights it seems he decided to work against the Sages.";
+    mes "\"Personally I think that he was jealous about Santa's influence and high position for quite a while. However, he took this as a reason to leave the Sages and based on our insights, so it seems he decided to work against the Sages.";
     mes "It really is a shame.\"";
     goto L_Close;