Barbarians quests: dialogue polishing.

1 files changed, 22 insertions, 23 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
index c8924df8..abe8a843 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
@@ -51,36 +51,36 @@
     mes "\"You are very small, better be careful in this snowy mountains. It is cold and dangerous monsters are here.\"";
     menu
         "Hello, my name is " + strcharinfo(0) + " and I'm not small. I'm a great warrior!",-,
-        "I'm " + strcharinfo(0) + ", don't underestimate me. I'm an experienced adventurer!" ,-,
+        "I'm " + strcharinfo(0) + ", don't underestimate me. I'm an experienced adventurer!",-,
         "I'm the legendary " + strcharinfo(0) + ", I've fought countless battles.",-;
 
     mes "Kimarr seems to be amused.";
     mes "[Kimarr]";
     mes "\"Really? Do you want to prove it?\"";
     menu
-        "Sure! What shall I do?", -,
-        "No, I don't need to prove anything.", L_Close;
+        "Sure! What shall I do?",-,
+        "No, I don't need to prove anything.",L_Close;
 
     mes "\"Every young member of our tribe proves his or her worth by hunting monsters.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"The first monsters to hunt are fluffies. Fluffies give a good meal for a young person and the fur can be used to make clothes and blankets.\"";
+    mes "\"The first monsters to hunt are Fluffies. Fluffies give a good meal for a young person and the fur can be used to make clothes and blankets.\"";
     next;
     set @state, 1;
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
 
 L_Explain_Game:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
-    mes "\"In that cave there are living fluffies. They like to eat apples.\"";
+    mes "\"In that cave there are living Fluffies. They like to eat apples.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"I also saw one of them getting excited about one of that sweet things you call 'cake'.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"You should be careful, other monsters living here might like the food as well.\"";
-    next;
     mes "\"Go to the cave entrance and throw food on the floor to make them come out.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Then hunt as many fluffies as you can until I tell you to stop.\"";
+    mes "\"You should be careful, other monsters living here might like the food as well.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Drop more food when no fluffies are left.\"";
+    mes "\"Hunt as many Fluffies as you can until I tell you to stop.\"";
+    next;
+    mes "\"Drop more food when no Fluffies are left.\"";
     next;
 
 // dialog starts here if you've asked about it but not done it (@state == 1)
@@ -88,9 +88,9 @@ L_Ask:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
     mes "\"So, are you going to try?\"";
     menu
-        "Yeah, let's start!", L_Game,
-        "Could you explain again?", L_Explain_Game,
-        "Maybe later.", -;
+        "Yeah, let's start!",L_Game,
+        "Could you explain again?",L_Explain_Game,
+        "Maybe later.",-;
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_AlreadyGotReward:
@@ -133,7 +133,6 @@ L_Reward:
     getitem "YetiSkinShirt", 1;
     set @state, 3;
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
-
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Full_Inv:
@@ -143,11 +142,11 @@ L_Full_Inv:
 // dialog starts here after you've completed this quest
 L_Again:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
-    mes "\"Does the hunter " + strcharinfo(0) + " want to hunt some fluffies again?\"";
+    mes "\"Does the hunter " + strcharinfo(0) + " want to hunt some Fluffies again?\"";
     menu
-        "Yeah!", L_Game,
-        "Can you tell me who were the most successful fluffy hunters?", L_ShowRecord,
-        "Not now.", L_Close;
+        "Yeah!",L_Game,
+        "Can you tell me who were the most successful Fluffy hunters?",L_ShowRecord,
+        "Not now.",L_Close;
 
 L_Game:
     if ($@Fluffy_Hunting)
@@ -170,7 +169,7 @@ L_Someone_Else:
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Attention:
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: You should be focused on hunting fluffies, not talking.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: You should be focused on hunting Fluffies, not talking.";
     end;
 
 OnTimer1000:
@@ -245,12 +244,12 @@ L_BeginHunting:
     // limit the number of monsters that can be spawned, to prevent people creating lag with massive amount of monsters
     if (($@Fluffy_Spawn + $@Fluffy_Alive) <= 100)
         goto L_SpawnFluffies;
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Wow, calm down, there are already too many fluffies around here.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Wow, calm down, there are already too many Fluffies around here.";
     set $@Fluffy_Spawn, 100 - $@Fluffy_Alive;
     if ($@Fluffy_Spawn <= 0)
         goto L_ContinueTimer;
 
- L_SpawnFluffies:
+L_SpawnFluffies:
     areamonster "033-1.gat", 79, 29, 88, 42, "", 1089, $@Fluffy_Spawn, "Kimarr::OnFluffyDeath";
 
     set $@Fluffy_Extra, 5 * @Fluffy_XmasCake + 3 * @Fluffy_Cake + 12 * ($@Fluffy_Alive + $@Fluffy_Spawn) + 7 * BaseLevel;
@@ -390,8 +389,8 @@ L_FinallyInsertMe:
     goto L_Reward1;
 
 L_NotGoodEnough:
-    npctalk  "What a disapointment, " + strcharinfo(0) + " hunted only " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: What a disapointment, you hunted only " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
+    npctalk  "What a disappointment, " + strcharinfo(0) + " hunted only " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: What a disappointment, you hunted only " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
     callsub S_Clean;
     end;
 
@@ -401,7 +400,7 @@ L_ShowRecord:
 L_ShowNextRecord:
     if ($Record_Fluffy_Kills[@loop] == 0)
         goto L_Close;
-    mes (@loop + 1) + " - " + $Record_Fluffy_Name$[@loop] + " - " + $Record_Fluffy_Kills[@loop] + " fluffies killed at " + $Record_Fluffy_Date$[@loop];
+    mes (@loop + 1) + " - " + $Record_Fluffy_Name$[@loop] + " - " + $Record_Fluffy_Kills[@loop] + " Fluffies killed at " + $Record_Fluffy_Date$[@loop];
     set @loop, @loop + 1;
     goto L_ShowNextRecord;