Spell check of new and updated Tulimshar NPCs. -Frost

2 files changed, 19 insertions, 19 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/024-1/eomie.txt b/world/map/npc/024-1/eomie.txt
index 0bff69d4..6999eccf 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/024-1/eomie.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/024-1/eomie.txt
@@ -46,10 +46,10 @@
     if (@state != 7)
         goto L_Close;
     menu
-        "I have this magic fertilizer from Tinris and need a spell casted on it.",-;
+        "I have this magic fertilizer from Tinris and need a spell cast on it.",-;
     mes "[Eomie]";
     mes "\"Oh? I see, that's a difficult task.";
-    mes "I'd be glad to help you, but unfortunaly I can't interrupt the magic I use to keep this spot of grass alive.\"";
+    mes "I'd be glad to help you, but unfortunately I can't interrupt the magic I use to keep this spot of grass alive.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"It's unusually hot at the moment, even for this desert area. It might have something to do with the aftereffects of the earthquake.\"";
     menu
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ L_GetStuff: // @state == 8
     menu
         "I have it.",-,
         "Where can I get Grass Seeds?",L_Hurnscald,
-        "How to get Ice Cubes? Where in the desert!",L_Mine,
+        "How can I get Ice Cubes? We're in the desert!",L_Mine,
         "Ok, I'll go and get it.",L_Close;
     if ((countitem("GrassSeed") < @grass_amount) || (countitem("BottleOfWater") < @water_amount) || (countitem("IceCube") < @ice_amount))
         goto L_NoItem;
@@ -75,16 +75,16 @@ L_GetStuff: // @state == 8
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
     mes "[Eomie]";
     mes "\"Very good.\"";
-    mes "She takes the things you brought her and uses them to create some balloon of coolness around the spot of grass.";
+    mes "She takes the things you brought her and uses them to create a bubble of coolness around the spot of grass.";
     misceffect sfx_magic_nature;
     next;
     mes "[Eomie]";
-    mes "\"This should last long enough to keep the spot of grass alive until I casted the spell on the fertilizer. And if some of it shrivels I still have the seeds you brought me which I can use to recover it.\"";
+    mes "\"This should last long enough to keep the spot of grass alive until I cast the spell on the fertilizer. And if some of it shrivels I still have the seeds you brought me which I can use to recover it.\"";
     next;
     mes "She takes the fertilizer and casts some invocations. After a while she's done and gives it back to you with a smile.";
     misceffect sfx_magic_nature;
     mes "[Eomie]";
-    mes "\"This should help you. I'm glad you're taking care about the plants. Not enough people do that nowadays.\"";
+    mes "\"This should help you. I'm glad you're taking care of the plants. Not enough people do that nowadays.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Hurnscald: // player asked how to get Grass Seeds
@@ -98,7 +98,7 @@ L_Mine: // player asked how to get Ice Cubes
     next;
     mes "\"But I heard that Ice Goblins were seen in this underground palace that was discovered in the desert south of the city. Maybe you can find Ice Cubes in there.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Though they don't let in everyone. Miners, Soldiers and sometimes an adventurer. I suggest to talk to Lieutnant Dausen about that.\"";
+    mes "\"Though they don't let in everyone. Miners, Soldiers and sometimes an adventurer. I suggest you talk to Lieutenant Dausen about that.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_CastedSpell: // @state >= 9 but below 14
@@ -107,7 +107,7 @@ L_CastedSpell: // @state >= 9 but below 14
     if (@state != 13)
         goto L_Close;
     menu
-        "It was and he created this Silk Headband as present for you.",-,
+        "It was and he created this Silk Headband as a present for you.",-,
         "(Mumble something and leave)",L_Close;
     if (countitem("SilkHeadband") < 1)
         goto L_NoItem;
diff --git a/world/map/npc/024-1/tinris.txt b/world/map/npc/024-1/tinris.txt
index 88ab1d42..a0313b32 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/024-1/tinris.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/024-1/tinris.txt
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ L_Annual: // @state == 2
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
     mes "[Tinris]";
     mes "\"Oh, thank you! You saved me!";
-    mes "Alright, now we can start with the magic fertilizer.\"";
+    mes "All right, now we can start with the magic fertilizer.\"";
     next;
 L_FirstTry: // @state == 3
     mes "[Tinris]";
@@ -96,9 +96,9 @@ L_FirstTry: // @state == 3
     misceffect sfx_magic_nature;
     next;
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"Ok. This should do it. But I'm not sure. I'm still working on the researches about this topic.";
+    mes "\"Ok. This should do it. But I'm not sure. I'm still researching this topic.";
     mes "Here, bring this to Anwar.\"";
-    mes "He gives you some bottle with the magic fertilizer. You put it away in a seperate pocket, so it doesn't get mixed with your inventory.";
+    mes "He gives you a bottle with the magic fertilizer. You put it away in a separate pocket, so it doesn't get mixed with your inventory.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_FirstTryDone: // @state >= 4 but below 6
@@ -112,7 +112,7 @@ L_FirstTryDone: // @state >= 4 but below 6
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
 L_SecondTry: // @state == 6
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"Oh no! Alright, we need to do another try.";
+    mes "\"Oh no! All right, we need to do another try.";
     mes "Bring me " + @slime_amount2 + " Maggot Slimes, " + @bugleg_amount2 + " Bug Legs, " + @stinger_amount2 + " Scorpion Stingers, " + @ash_amount2 + " Piles of Ash and " + @cactusp_amount + " Cactus Potion.\"";
     menu
         "Here it is.",-,
@@ -129,31 +129,31 @@ L_SecondTry: // @state == 6
     mes "Tinris takes the things and starts to mix and mumble again.";
     misceffect sfx_magic_nature;
     next;
-    mes "I takes quite a while.";
+    mes "It takes quite a while.";
     next;
     mes "He looks rather stressed while working on the mixture.";
     next;
     mes "He sighs.";
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"Mh, I think the mixture itself is good. But I can't get the spells right. Maybe you should ask Professor Eomie to cast it, she's a genius regarding nature magic.\"";
+    mes "\"Mh, I think the mixture itself is good. But I can't get the spells right. Maybe you should ask Professor Eomie to cast it; she's a genius with nature magic.\"";
     mes "He gives you the bottle with the magic fertilizer.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Eomie: // @state >= 7 but below 9
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"I did the best I could. But it seems I'm not experienced enough to cast the spells correctly. Better ask Professor Eomie for help.\"";
+    mes "\"I did the best I could, but it seems I'm not experienced enough to cast the spells correctly. Better ask Professor Eomie for help.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_FertilizerDone: // @state == 9
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"I heard Eomie casted the spell? I really hope it'll work this time. Bring the magic fertilizer to Anwar now.\"";
+    mes "\"I heard Eomie cast the spell? I really hope it'll work this time. Bring the magic fertilizer to Anwar now.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_GiveGift: // @state == 11
     mes "[Tinris]";
     mes "\"Ah, did Anwar try the new fertilizer?\"";
     menu
-        "Yes, it works great and he sent me to give you this selfmade Green V-Neck Sweater.",-,
+        "Yes, it works great and he asked me to give you this Green V-Neck Sweater he made.",-,
         "Not yet.",L_Close;
     if (countitem("GreenVNeckSweater") < 1)
         goto L_NoItem;
@@ -167,8 +167,8 @@ L_GiveGift: // @state == 11
 
 L_Done: // @state >= 12
     mes "[Tinris]";
-    mes "\"My girlfriend was very happy about the Chocolate Cake and Professor Eomie was happy about my work on the magic fertilizer.\"";
-    mes "He twinkels.";
+    mes "\"My girlfriend was delighted with the Chocolate Cake and Professor Eomie was happy with my work on the magic fertilizer.\"";
+    mes "He twinkles.";
     mes "[Tinris]";
     mes "\"We're a good team.\"";
     goto L_Close;