Various dialog fixes in Tulim

viz., the Kylian quest, the tombstones, and various other NPCs

1 files changed, 17 insertions, 14 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/002-2/kps.txt b/world/map/npc/002-2/kps.txt
index 558166ec..73b40466 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/002-2/kps.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/002-2/kps.txt
@@ -25,23 +25,25 @@
 
 L_Default:
     mes "[KPS Manager]";
-    mes "\"Kylian staying at the Inn bought this shop recently.\"";
-    mes "\"I'm waiting for him to open the shop.\"";
+    mes "\"A rich salesman named Kylian bought this shop recently.\"";
+    mes "\"I'm waiting for him to give the go-ahead on opening it up, but I haven't heard from him in a while.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"I wonder if he needs any help?\"";
+    mes "\"I wonder if he needs any help...\"";
+    next;
+    mes "\"If you could go over and check on him in the inn while I tend to the store, I'd really appreciate it.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_OfferJob:
     mes "[KPS Manager]";
-    mes "\"Hello and what how can I help you today?\"";
+    mes "\"Hello! How can I help you today?\"";
     menu
-        "My name is " + strcharinfo(0), L_MyName,
+        "My name is " + strcharinfo(0) + ".", L_MyName,
         "Nothing.", L_Close;
 
 L_MyName:
     set @state, 11;
     callfunc "SetKylianQuest";
-    mes "\"Ahhh, Kylian said you would be dropping by.\"";
+    mes "\"Ah. Kylian said you would be dropping by.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"I assume you are looking for some work?\"";
     menu
@@ -84,10 +86,10 @@ L_RandJob:
     goto L_JobInfo;
 
 L_JobInfo:
-    mes "\"We have a delivery for:* " + $@random_quests$[@rand_quest] + "\"";
+    mes "\"We have a delivery for ##B" + $@random_quests$[@rand_quest] + "##b.\"";
     menu
-        "Take It.", L_StartRun,
-        "Anything Else?", L_RandJob,
+        "I'll take it.", L_StartRun,
+        "Anything else?", L_RandJob,
         "I need a break.", L_Close;
 
 L_StartRun:
@@ -99,7 +101,7 @@ L_StartRun:
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_RunStarted:
-    mes "Deliver this package to:* " + $@random_quests$[@run] + "\"";
+    mes "Deliver this package to ##B" + $@random_quests$[@run] + "##b.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_RunComplete:
@@ -118,7 +120,7 @@ L_SeeKylian:
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Failed:
-    mes "\"You need to be faster next time to earn a bonus.\"";
+    mes "\"If you're faster next time, you can earn a bonus.\"";
     next;
     goto L_RunAgain;
 
@@ -131,7 +133,7 @@ L_KylianReward:
     mes "[" + $@delivery_money + " money]";
     mes "[" + ($@delivery_exp_mod * BaseLevel) + " experience points]";
     next;
-    mes "\"I have a message Kylian wants me to send you over right away.\"";
+    mes "\"I've got news for you! Kylian wants me to send you over right away.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_RunAgain:
@@ -141,12 +143,13 @@ L_RunAgain:
     mes "[" + $@delivery_money + " money]";
     mes "[" + ($@delivery_exp_mod * BaseLevel) + " experience points]";
     next;
-    mes "\"Good job, keep up the nice work and I'm sure the bonus will give you a bonus.\"";
+    mes "\"Good job! Keep up the nice work, and I'm sure the boss will give you a bonus.\"";
     next;
     goto L_StartJobAgain;
 
 L_NoPackages:
-    mes "\"Come back tomorrow, maybe we will have some more work.\"";
+    mes "\"Sorry, but we don't have any more jobs open right now.\"";
+    mes "\"Come back tomorrow; maybe we will have some more work then.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close: