Language check.

1 files changed, 19 insertions, 19 deletions

diff --git a/npc/002-1_Sandstorm/lieutenant_dausen.txt b/npc/002-1_Sandstorm/lieutenant_dausen.txt
index 65616a72..04d4d977 100644
--- a/npc/002-1_Sandstorm/lieutenant_dausen.txt
+++ b/npc/002-1_Sandstorm/lieutenant_dausen.txt
@@ -13,13 +13,13 @@
 	if (TMW_Quest == 12) goto L_LD_Start;
 
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Hello.  I am Lieutenant Dausen.  I monitor the monster threats surrounding the city to ensure the safety of its citizens.\"";
+	mes "\"Hello.  I am Lieutenant Dausen.  I monitor the monster threat around the city to ensure the safety of its citizens.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Start:
 	set TMW_Quest, 13;
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Our here in the desert, it sure does get hot.  My men and I get thirsty rather quickly.  If you can get some cactus drinks, our favorite, we'd surely appreciate your effort.  About 10 will do.\"";
+	mes "\"Out here in the desert, it sure does get hot!  My men and I get thirsty rather quickly.  [Cactus Drink]s are our favourite; if you can get some for us, we'd surely appreciate your effort.  About 10 would do.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Drinks:
@@ -30,19 +30,19 @@ L_LD_Drinks:
 	delitem "CactusDrink", 10;
 	getitem "Boots", 1;
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Great!  This will help us make it through the hot day.  As a gift for your troubles, take these boots to keep your feet from burning on the sand.  Have a good day..\"";
+	mes "\"Great!  This will help us make it through the hot day.  As a gift for your troubles, take these boots to keep your feet from burning on the sand.  Have a good day...\"";
 	next;
-	mes "Mumbles to himself and rubs his head.";
+	mes "Lieutenant Dausen mumbles to himself and rubs his head.";
 	next;
-	mes "\"However, I have a problem.  I mixed up the orders to my men Nickos and Steven.  If someone would let them know they're going to have to hold their post for a while longer instead of taking a break, it would help me a great deal.  However, I can't leave my post.  Oh what to do, what to do..\"";
+	mes "\"I have another problem, though.  I mixed up the orders to my men, Nickos and Stewen.  Someone needs to let them know they're going to have to hold their post for a while longer instead of taking a break.  However, I can't leave my post!  Oh, what to do, what to do...\"";
 	menu
 		"Oh, it wouldn't be a bother to me to help you out, since you helped me out.", L_LD_Help,
-		"Thanks for the boots, gotta run.", L_LD_NoHelp;
+		"Thanks for the boots, gotta run now.", L_LD_NoHelp;
 	close;
 
 L_LD_NotEnough_Drink:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Hi again.  My men and I sure are thirsty for our favorite drink, the cactus drink.  If we had about 10, it would help us out a great deal in this sandstorm.\"";
+	mes "\"Hi again.  My men and I sure are thirsty for our favorite drink, the [Cactus Drink].  If we had about 10, it would help us out a great deal in this sandstorm.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_TooMany:
@@ -52,53 +52,53 @@ L_LD_TooMany:
 
 L_LD_Woe_Is_Me:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"I have a problem.  I mixed up the orders to my men.  If someone would let them know they're going to have to hold their post for a while longer instead of taking a break, it would help me a great deal.  However, I can't leave my post.  Oh what to do, what to do..\"";
+	mes "\"I have a problem.  I mixed up the orders to my men!  Someone needs to let them know they're going to have to hold their post for a while longer instead of taking a break.  However, I can't leave my post.  Oh, what to do, what to do...\"";
 	menu
-		"Oh, it wouldn't bother me to help you out, since you helped me out", L_LD_Help,
-		"Bye bye.", L_LD_NoHelp;
+		"Oh, it wouldn't be a bother to me to help you out, since you helped me out.", L_LD_Help,
+		"Bye-bye.", L_LD_NoHelp;
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Help:
 	set TMW_Quest, 15;
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Oh!  You would!  You are ever most helpful.  Could you let Stewen know first.  I worry about the monsters from the eastern desert and he should know before anyone to hold his post.  Hope to hear from you soon!\"";
+	mes "\"Oh!  Would you?  You are ever most helpful!  Could you let Stewen know first?  I'm the most worried about the monsters from the eastern desert and he should know first to hold his post.  Hope to hear from you soon!\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_NoHelp:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"See you later.\"";
+	mes "\"See you later then.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Waits:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"I hope Stewen holds his post.  If you could tell them to do so, it would help me out a great deal.\"";
+	mes "\"I do hope Stewen holds his post.  If you could tell them to do so, it would help me out a great deal.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Nickos:
 	set TMW_Quest, 17;
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Thanks for letting Stewen know.  Can you now tell Nickos to hold his post?  He guards the mine to the south, monitoring the monster threat and protecting the miners when he can.\"";
+	mes "\"Thanks for letting Stewen know.  Can you now tell Nickos to hold his post too?  He guards the mine to the south, monitoring the monster threat and protecting the miners when he can.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Nickos_Waits:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Can you let Nickos know to hold his post?  It would help out a great deal.  He is guarding the mine to the south of here.\"";
+	mes "\"Could you let Nickos know to hold his post?  It would be very helpful.  He is guarding the mine south of here.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Orders:
 	set TMW_Quest, 19;
 	set zeny, zeny + 500;
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"Thank you for clearing up the orders to my men.  Here's some gold for your assistance.\"";
+	mes "\"Thank you for clearing up the orders to my men!  Here's some gold for your efforts.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"If you think you can handle these monster threats out here, I'm sure Nickos and the miners could use some help.  Talk to you later.\"";
+	mes "\"If you think you can handle the monsters lurking out here, I'm sure Nickos and the miners could use some help.  Talk to you later.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Miners:
 	mes "[Lieutenant Dausen]";
-	mes "\"I monitor the monster threats surrounding the city to ensure the safe of its citizens.\"";
+	mes "\"I monitor the monster threat around the city to ensure the safety of its citizens.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"If you think you can handle these monster threats out here, I'm sure Nickos and the miners could use some help.  Talk to you later.\"";
+	mes "\"If you think you can handle the monsters lurking out here, I'm sure Nickos and the miners could use some help.  Talk to you later.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_LD_Key: