Minor grammar edits to birrod, kimarr, and yerrnk

3 files changed, 38 insertions, 38 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt
index c0e159e3..28dd6c56 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt
@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ L_Kimarr:
     mes "[Birrod]";
     mes "\"Great! Very well done! Welcome to our tribe.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"But I think, Kimarr has something for you.\"";
+    mes "\"I think Kimarr has something for you.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Hunting:
@@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ L_Hunting:
     mes "\"Hello, " + strcharinfo(0) + "! Would you like to prove your hunting skills again?\"";
     next;
     mes "\"I noticed some groups of Wolverns in the forest west of here which are unusually aggressive.";
-    mes "This makes it dangerous for all the small people from the town nearby to go there.\"";
+    mes "This makes it dangerous for all the small people from the nearby town to go there.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"To prove your skills, go to the forest and hunt down " + $@Q_Barbarians_wolvern_amount + " of the very aggressive Wolverns.\"";
     next;
@@ -72,14 +72,14 @@ L_Wolverns_Done:
     getexp @wolvern_exp, 0;
     if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0)
         goto L_Not_Ready;
-    mes "\"Your skills are impressing. You are worthy to be called a warrior of the Mangarr, if you accept.\"";
+    mes "\"Your skills are impressive. You are worthy to be called a warrior of the Mangarr, if you accept.\"";
     next;
     goto L_Questions;
 
 L_Questions:
     if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0)
         goto L_Not_Ready;
-    mes "Birrod has a very ceremonial look on his face.";
+    mes "Birrod has a very solemn look on his face.";
     mes "[Birrod]";
     mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", are you ready to become a full-fledged member of our tribe, the Mangarr?\"";
     menu
@@ -89,13 +89,13 @@ L_Questions:
     mes "Birrod nods earnestly.";
     mes "[Birrod]";
     mes "\"I will ask you some questions.";
-    mes "Think well and be honest, because it will depend on your answers if you will be considered worthily.\"";
+    mes "Think well and be honest, because your answers will determine whether you are worthy.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"What's the most important thing for a true warrior?\"";
     menu
         "Strength!",L_Fail11,
         "A good weapon.",L_Fail12,
-        "Braveness.",L_Success11;
+        "Bravery.",L_Success11;
 L_Fail11:
     mes "[Birrod]";
     mes "\"Strength is indeed important for a warrior. But before you can show strength, you need to have something else.\"";
@@ -122,7 +122,7 @@ L_Fail21:
     goto L_No_Member;
 L_Fail22:
     mes "[Birrod]";
-    mes "\"Honorably but stupid.\"";
+    mes "\"Honorable, but stupid.\"";
     next;
     goto L_No_Member;
 L_Success21:
@@ -152,8 +152,8 @@ L_Fail31:
 L_Success3:
     mes "\"What is your goal in life?\"";
     menu
-        "Learning new things and see the world.",L_Success41,
-        "Becoming as powerful as I can.",L_Fail41,
+        "Learn new things and see the world.",L_Success41,
+        "Become as powerful as I can.",L_Fail41,
         "Protect the ones I love.",L_Success42;
 L_Success41:
     mes "[Birrod]";
@@ -194,17 +194,17 @@ L_Success5:
     setskill SKILL_WARRIOR_RAGING, 1;
     set @state, 6;
     callsub S_Update_Mask;
-    mes "You feel an exciting vim inside of you.";
+    mes "You feel an exciting energy inside you.";
     mes "[Birrod]";
     mes "\"You are now a warrior of the Mangarr.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Therefore you gain the ability to put back your own safety for Raging in battle with a tremendous power.";
-    mes "This power now lies within you, waiting for someone to help you focusing on it.\"";
+    mes "\"As a Mangarr warrior, you gain the ability to put back your own safety for Raging in battle with a tremendous power.";
+    mes "This power now lies within you, waiting for someone to help you focus on it.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Impressed:
     mes "[Birrod]";
-    mes "\"I'm very proud of you being a member of the tribe.\"";
+    mes "\"I'm very proud that you're a member of the tribe.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Not_Ready:
diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
index abe8a843..6e4a12ba 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/kimarr.txt
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@
     next;
     mes "\"I am Kimarr, hunter and warrior of the Mangarr.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"You are very small, better be careful in this snowy mountains. It is cold and dangerous monsters are here.\"";
+    mes "\"You are very small and must be careful in these snowy mountains. It is cold, and dangerous monsters are here.\"";
     menu
         "Hello, my name is " + strcharinfo(0) + " and I'm not small. I'm a great warrior!",-,
         "I'm " + strcharinfo(0) + ", don't underestimate me. I'm an experienced adventurer!",-,
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ L_Explain_Game:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
     mes "\"In that cave there are living Fluffies. They like to eat apples.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"I also saw one of them getting excited about one of that sweet things you call 'cake'.\"";
+    mes "\"I also saw one of them getting excited about one of those sweet things you call 'cake'.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"Go to the cave entrance and throw food on the floor to make them come out.\"";
     next;
@@ -95,7 +95,7 @@ L_Ask:
 
 L_AlreadyGotReward:
     npctalk strcharinfo(0) + " killed " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies and has once again proven to be a good hunter.";
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: Once again you prove you are worth as a hunter! You killed " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Kimarr: Once again you prove your worth as a hunter! You killed " + $@Fluffy_Kills + " Fluffies.";
     callsub S_Clean;
     goto L_Close;
 
@@ -121,7 +121,7 @@ L_Reward1:
 // full at the time, when you next initiate dialog (with @state == 2)
 L_Reward:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
-    mes "\"That was very impressive - now you can call yourself a hunter, " + strcharinfo(0) + ".\"";
+    mes "\"That was very impressive. Now you can call yourself a hunter, " + strcharinfo(0) + ".\"";
     next;
 
     getinventorylist;
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ L_Game:
 
 L_Someone_Else:
     mes "[Kimarr]";
-    mes "\"At the moment someone else is hunting. Let's wait until that hunting has ended.\"";
+    mes "\"Someone else is hunting right now. Let's wait until that hunt has ended.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Attention:
@@ -176,7 +176,7 @@ OnTimer1000:
 // Checking if player is logged
     if (attachrid($@Fluffy_FighterID) == 0)
         goto L_GotOut;
-// Checking if player is still in the map or used a towell or spell to get out
+// Checking if player is still in the map or used a towel or spell to get out
     if (getareausers("033-1.gat", 79, 28, 88, 42) == 0)
         goto L_GotOut;
     if (PC_DIE_COUNTER > $@Fluffy_PC_Deaths)
diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt
index 8cb9e13d..64238524 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@
     mes "[Barbarian]";
     mes "\"Hello. I'm Yerrnk, first warrior of the Mangarr.\"";
     next;
-    mes "Yerrnk looks at you in a reserved way.";
+    mes "Yerrnk looks at you cautiously.";
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
     mes "\"Please take care of your own business.\"";
     goto L_Close;
@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ L_Fluffy:
     mes "He sighs.";
     next;
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
-    mes "\"Are you going to accept Kimarr's task? It's an ancient ceremony in our tribe. A young member is accepted as an adult when completing it.\"";
+    mes "\"Are you going to accept Kimarr's task? It's an ancient ceremony in our tribe. A young member is accepted as an adult after completing it.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Kimarr:
@@ -39,32 +39,32 @@ L_Duty:
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
     mes "\"I'm not sure if you are aware about the meaning of your actions.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"You passed the inition ritus for hunters of our tribe. That means now you are a hunter of our tribe, with all the rights and duties that come along with that.\"";
+    mes "\"You passed the initiation rite for hunters of our tribe. That means now you are a hunter of our tribe, with all the rights and duties that come along with that.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"So you'll have to obey our laws and traditions, protect and help any member of our tribe that is in need and never show weakness nor fear in battle.\"";
+    mes "\"So you'll have to obey our laws and traditions, protect and help any member of our tribe that is in need, and show neither weakness nor fear in battle.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Keep this in mind. If you fail you'll have to recieve the elders judgement.\"";
+    mes "\"Keep this in mind. If you fail you'll have to receive the elders' judgement.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Sorrow:
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
     mes "\"I noticed that you're getting along with Kimarr and Birrod very well. That's good.\"";
-    mes "He smiles, but then an expression of worry gets back to his face.";
+    mes "He smiles, but then an expression of worry returns to his face.";
     next;
 
 L_Mission:
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
-    mes "\"Our tribe is going through dire straits. We used to live in harmony with the mountain ever since.";
+    mes "\"Our tribe is going through dire times. We have lived in harmony with the mountain since time beyond memory.";
     mes "Life is hard in the snowy mountains, but this life suits our nature.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Some weeks ago the Yetis started to act very strange. Usually they are very shy, but now...";
+    mes "\"Some weeks ago the Yetis started to act very strangely. Usually they are very shy, but now....";
     mes "They left the secluded areas high up in the mountains they used to live on and started roaming our hunting grounds.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"It became very dangerous to leave the village, so it's even harder to gather enough food to survive.";
-    mes "But not only this, the Yetis are getting more daring every day - they might attack the village itself sooner or later.\"";
+    mes "Not only this, but the Yetis are getting more daring every day. They might attack the village itself sooner or later.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"Other wild animals got more aggressive as well, though the Yetis are the most dangerous.";
-    mes "Something like that has never happened before. We have no idea what could cause the animals to behave like this.\"";
+    mes "\"Other wild animals are more aggressive as well, though the Yetis are the most dangerous.";
+    mes "Something like this has never happened before. We have no idea what could cause the animals to behave like this.\"";
     next;
     mes "\"That's why we were sent on a mission to find and talk to Santa, one of the Sages of Kaizei.";
     mes "The Sages are wizards of great power and wisdom, and we hope Santa might be able to give us advice.\"";
@@ -73,11 +73,11 @@ L_Mission:
 L_Birrod:
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
     mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", I have to admit that I'm surprised by your skills.";
-    mes "You've proved your braveness and strength.\"";
+    mes "You've proven your bravery and strength.\"";
     next;
     if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0)
         goto L_Not_Ready;
-    mes "\"Please talk to Birrod to receive the initiation ritual to become a warrior of the Mangarr.\"";
+    mes "\"Please talk to Birrod to receive the initiation rite to become a warrior of the Mangarr.\"";
     menu
         "Alright.",-,
         "Can you tell me again what you are here for?",L_Mission;
@@ -97,7 +97,7 @@ L_Warrior:
     mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", welcome back!";
     mes "Do you have any question?\"";
     menu
-        "Everything's alright, thanks.",-,
+        "Everything's all right, thanks.",-,
         "What are you doing down here?",L_Mission,
         "Can you explain the Raging ability to me?",L_Skill,
         "Do you have a task for me?",L_Task;
@@ -108,14 +108,14 @@ L_Skill:
     mes "\"As a warrior of our tribe it should be the most important thing to you to defend weaker members of the tribe.";
     mes "To achieve this goal our warriors are training the skill to stand the pain of being hit and even use it to get into a state of rage.\"";
     next;
-    mes "\"It only works in a melee fight, when you hear your opponent gasping, smell his sweat, and feel the heat of his body.\"";
+    mes "\"It works only in a melee fight, when you hear your opponent gasping, smell his sweat, and feel the heat of his body.\"";
     next;
-    mes "Yerrnk gets excited, then he pauses a moment calming down.";
-    mes "\"Basically its a neglect of your own defense but therefor being able to hit the enemy with outstanding might.\"";
+    mes "Yerrnk gets excited, then he pauses a moment to calm down.";
+    mes "\"Basically you neglect of your own defense but gain the ability to hit your enemy with outstanding might.\"";
     next;
     mes "[Yerrnk]";
-    mes "\"You can imagine that this comprises some danger. That's why we usually fight as a group, so a weakened warrior can step back and recover while the others keep the fight.";
-    mes "It's also beneficial to have a healer, but very few members of our tribe are born with the capability to wield magic.\"";
+    mes "\"You can imagine that this creates some danger. That's why we usually fight as a group, so a weakened warrior can step back and recover while the others continue to fight.";
+    mes "It's also beneficial to have a healer, but very few members of our tribe are born with the ability to wield magic.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Task: