Better dialog for Aisha

1 files changed, 12 insertions, 12 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/001-1/children.txt b/world/map/npc/001-1/children.txt
index 6749f0e3..5ad738a9 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/001-1/children.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/001-1/children.txt
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@
 
 L_1:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"Maggots are soo slimey!\"";
+    mes "\"Maggots are so slimey!\" %%^";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_2:
@@ -26,12 +26,12 @@ L_2:
 
 L_3:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"There are so many monsters; I hate scorpions!\"";
+    mes "\"There are so many monsters! I hate scorpions!\" %%3";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_4:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"When I grow up, I want to be strong enough to kill a scorpion!\"";
+    mes "\"When I grow up, I want to be strong enough to kill a scorpion!\" %%=";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_5:
@@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ L_5:
 
 L_6:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"Have you tried to eat a roasted maggot?  They are sooo yummy!  And you feel much healthier afterwards, too!\"";
+    mes "\"Have you tried to eat a roasted maggot? They're sooo yummy! Mommy says they're healthy too!\" %%8";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_7:
@@ -51,23 +51,23 @@ L_7:
 
 L_8:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"That volcano was sooo scary!  The earth was shaking and everything was breaking down... but now they have rebuilt everything.\"";
+    mes "\"That earthquake was sooo scary! The earth was shaking and everything was breaking down... but now they've rebuilt everything.\"";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_9:
-    mes "\"I know a very bad word. But I must not say it, because monsters will come and get me if I do!\"";
+    mes "\"I know a very bad word. But I can't say it because monsters will come and get me if I do!\"";
     next;
     menu
         "A bad word?", L_tell,
-        "Oh, you better keep it for yourself then.", L_Close;
+        "Oh. You better keep it to yourself then.", L_Close;
 
 L_tell:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "\"Yes, I heard my mother say it once. And she made me promise her to never say it. Never.\"";
+    mes "\"I heard my mother say it once, and she made me promise her to never say it. ##BNever##b!\"";
     next;
     menu
         "If I promise to never tell anyone, can you tell me the word?", L_keepword,
-        "I understand, you do not need to tell me...", L_giveword,
+        "I understand. You don't need to tell me...", L_giveword,
         "Goodbye!", L_Close;
 
 L_keepword:
@@ -77,13 +77,13 @@ L_keepword:
 
 L_giveword:
     mes "[Aisha]";
-    mes "Aisha looks around as she hushes you to silence. After a few seconds, she whispers to you.";
-    mes "\"I like you!  So I will tell you the bad word. But you can't tell anyone else about it!  The bad word is '" + getspellinvocation("aggravate") + "'.\"";
+    mes "Aisha looks around as she leans in and hushes you to silence. After a few seconds, she whispers to you:";
+    mes "\"I like you, so I'll tell you the bad word. But you can't tell anyone else about it! The bad word is '" + getspellinvocation("aggravate") + ".'\"";
     next;
 
     mes "[Aisha]";
     mes "Terrified, she looks around once more.";
-    mes "\"But you mustn't tell anyone!\"";
+    mes "\"But you can't tell anyone!\" %%>";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close: