summaryrefslogtreecommitdiff
path: root/world/map/npc/056-1
diff options
context:
space:
mode:
authorDino Paskvan <dpaskvan@gmail.com>2013-07-15 16:05:44 +0200
committerDino Paskvan <dpaskvan@gmail.com>2013-07-15 16:05:44 +0200
commit5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85 (patch)
tree82fe199c1fbf82f2ff84240a400da6171d4daa99 /world/map/npc/056-1
parent49fb132b3762ea739047fb5f14da6e1e5fb19f26 (diff)
downloadserverdata-5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85.tar.gz
serverdata-5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85.tar.bz2
serverdata-5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85.tar.xz
serverdata-5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85.zip
Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing
All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.
Diffstat (limited to 'world/map/npc/056-1')
-rw-r--r--world/map/npc/056-1/flowerpentagram5.txt24
1 files changed, 12 insertions, 12 deletions
diff --git a/world/map/npc/056-1/flowerpentagram5.txt b/world/map/npc/056-1/flowerpentagram5.txt
index 6562d8e8..345ecf2a 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/056-1/flowerpentagram5.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/056-1/flowerpentagram5.txt
@@ -7,11 +7,11 @@
if (OrumQuest == 30) goto L_FifthFlower;
- message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place.";
+ message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd about this place.";
end;
L_FifthFlower:
- mes "This have to be the place for the last magical flower. When you place it, the pentagram will be completed.";
+ mes "This has to be the spot for the last magical flower. When you place it, the pentagram will be completed.";
menu
"Place the flower.", -,
"Leave.", L_Close;
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_FifthFlower:
if (isin("056-1.gat", 61, 30, 63, 32))
goto L_Place;
- mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away.";
+ mes "This isn't working, you're too far away.";
goto L_Close;
L_Place:
@@ -36,9 +36,9 @@ L_Place:
if (@localMonsterCount > 4)
goto L_MonstersAlive;
- mes "Nervous of what's going to happen, you take the last of the flowers and put it into place.";
+ mes "Nervous about what's going to happen, you take the last of the flowers and put it into its place.";
next;
- mes "Tension builds up around you, much stronger than all the times before. It pressures your head, your nose starts bleeding.";
+ mes "Tension builds up around you, much stronger than before. You can feel it compressing your head, and a liquid warmth spreads under your nose, leaving a metallic taste on your lips.";
heal -5, 0;
next;
callfunc "FlowerPentagramCount";
@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ L_Place:
goto L_NoFlower;
delitem "RedSummonFlower", 1;
- mes "The moment you think you can't endure it anymore, the webbing of the world seems to tear apart.";
+ mes "The pressure builds to the point where you don't think you can endure it any longer; the fabric that binds your consciousness together seemingly unravels.";
set OrumQuest, 31;
close2;
areamonster "056-1.gat", 56, 26, 80, 46, "", 1105, 3, "#FlowerPentagram5::OnSquirrelDeath";
@@ -107,18 +107,18 @@ OnBScorpionDeath:
end;
L_TooEarly:
- mes "Then everything calms down again and then tension vanishes. You're unsure what's going on.";
+ mes "Suddenly, everything calms down again and the tension vanishes. You find yourself confused about what's going on.";
next;
mes "You pick up the flower again.";
next;
- mes "Looking at the place more closely, it seems another summoning has happened just before, leaving the path between this world and the astral plane drained and exhausted.";
+ mes "Looking at the place more closely, it seems another summoning has happened just before, leaving the pathway between this world and the astral plane drained and exhausted.";
next;
- mes "You should wait a while until it recovers, or go and search the creatures that got summoned.";
+ mes "You should wait a while until it recharges, or go and search for the creatures that were summoned.";
goto L_Close;
L_MonstersAlive:
mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence.";
- mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!";
+ mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!";
next;
mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself.";
goto L_Close;
@@ -129,8 +129,8 @@ L_NoFlower:
goto L_Close;
L_PlacedFifthFlower:
- mes "This is the place where you put the last one of Orum's magical flowers.";
- mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot.";
+ mes "This is where you placed the last of Orum's magical flowers.";
+ mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here.";
goto L_Close;
L_Close: