Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing

All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.

1 files changed, 11 insertions, 11 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt b/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt
index 364963c1..10bf0539 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt
@@ -7,11 +7,11 @@
     if (OrumQuest > 26) goto L_PlacedFourthFlower;
     if (OrumQuest == 26) goto L_FourthFlower;
 
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd about this place.";
     end;
 
 L_FourthFlower:
-    mes "This is the spot to place the fourth of Orum's magical flowers.";
+    mes "This is the spot where you have to place the fourth of Orum's magical flowers.";
     menu
         "Place the flower.", -,
         "Leave.", L_Close;
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_FourthFlower:
     if (isin("055-1.gat", 140, 88, 142, 90))
         goto L_Place;
 
-    mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away.";
+    mes "This isn't working, you're too far away.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Place:
@@ -39,8 +39,8 @@ L_Place:
     if (countitem("YellowSummonFlower") < 1)
         goto L_NoFlower;
     delitem "YellowSummonFlower", 1;
-    mes "Worried about what will leak from the astral plane this time, you prepare yourself and put the flower in place.";
-    mes "As expected you feel the magical tension building up. They're coming.";
+    mes "Worried about what will shift from the astral plane this time, you prepare yourself and put the flower in place.";
+    mes "As expected, you feel the magical tension building up. They're coming.";
     set OrumQuest, 27;
     close2;
     areamonster "055-1.gat", 133, 87, 144, 99, "", 1105, 1, "#FlowerPentagram4::OnSquirrelDeath";
@@ -98,24 +98,24 @@ OnBScorpionDeath:
 
 L_MonstersAlive:
     mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence.";
-    mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!";
+    mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!";
     next;
     mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_NoFlower:
     mes "You search your belongings for the magical flower. Where is it?";
-    mes "If you lost it, you should talk to Orum.";
+    mes "If you lost it, you should talk to Orum again.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedFourthFlower:
-    mes "Here you put the fourth of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "There's a slight glowing of magic power around the place, waiting to be unleashed when you put the last one into place.";
+    mes "You placed the fourth of Orum's magical flowers here.";
+    mes "You can still feel the magical power shimmering around this place, waiting to be unleashed.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedFifthFlower:
-    mes "This is the place where you put the fourth of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot.";
+    mes "This is where you placed the fourth of Orum's magical flowers.";
+    mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close: