Initial spell/grammar check for tutorial

1 files changed, 29 insertions, 28 deletions

diff --git a/npc/042-2/sorfina.txt b/npc/042-2/sorfina.txt
index 5b55997f..53596b32 100644
--- a/npc/042-2/sorfina.txt
+++ b/npc/042-2/sorfina.txt
@@ -15,12 +15,12 @@ L_Start:
 	mes "";
 	mes "[Old Woman]";
 	mes "\"Ah, you woke up. It seems you collapsed after you left the boat that brought you to Tulimshar.";
-	mes "A group of ragtags immediatly took advantage of that and stole all your stuff!\"";
+	mes "A group of ragtags immediately took advantage of that and stole all your stuff!\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"My little granddaughter Tanisha saw that, but couldn't do anything to stop them.";
 	mes "She hurried to get someone to help. It was too late to catch the thieves, but at least the helpers brought you here to recover.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"We're in the suburbs of Tulimshar here and this area of the town is full of shady people, so I don't think there's a chance to get back your stuff.\"";
+	mes "\"We're in the suburbs of Tulimshar here and this area of the town is full of shady people, so I don't think there's a chance to get your stuff back.\"";
 	mes "She has a sad look on her face, but then she shakes her head and smiles.";
 	next;
 	mes "[Old Woman]";
@@ -46,8 +46,8 @@ L_Tut:
 	mes "You're not used to the hot weather, right?\"";
 	next;
 L_Carpet:
-	mes "\"Try to do some steps and walk to that red carpet over there.";
-	mes "Just use the arrow keys or click at the place you want to go to.\"";
+	mes "\"Try to take a few steps and walk to that red carpet over there.";
+	mes "Just use the arrow keys or click on the place you want to go to.\"";
 	if (!sorfina)
 		set sorfina, 1;
 	close;
@@ -62,25 +62,25 @@ L_Chest:
 	close;
 
 L_Naked:
-	mes "\"Press F3 or click at the button for your equipment in the bar at the upper right corner to open your inventory.\"";
+	mes "\"Press F3 or click on the Inventory button in the bar at the upper right corner to open your bag.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"After we talked click on the shirt and press the equip button.\"";
+	mes "\"Once we stop talking, click on the shirt and press the equip button.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"Talk to me again when you got dressed. You can either click on me, or press N to focus on me and T to talk.\"";
+	mes "\"Talk to me again after you get dressed. You can either click on me, or press N to focus on me and T to talk.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_Clothes:
 	if (getequipid(equip_torso) < 0) goto L_Naked;
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
-	mes "\"That's much better, don't you think so?\"";
+	mes "\"That's much better, don't you think?\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"I think this will help you a bit. To get more informations, press the button Setup and look at the controls on the Keyboard tab. You can also change them as you like.";
 	mes "Talk to me again if you want me to explain more things.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"Now you should go to see my granddaughter, she is very worried. She's in the storehouse, that's the second building southeast from here.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"Oh, and if you're looking for work, you should talk to Aidan when you go to main Tulimshar. They're giving rewards for monster hunting.";
-	mes "You can find him near the south gate. Well, good luck.\"";
+	mes "\"Oh, and if you're looking for work, you should talk to Aidan when you go to Tulimshar. They're giving rewards for monster hunting.";
+	mes "You can find him near the south gate. Good luck.\"";
 	set sorfina, 4;
 	close;
 
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ L_Again:
 	next;
 	if (hasan)
 		menu
-			"A guy named Hasan doesn't let me enter main Tulimshar.",L_Hasan,
+			"A guy named Hasan won't let me enter Tulimshar.",L_Hasan,
 			"Yes, could you explain again about...",L_Explain,
 			"No, thanks.",L_Close;
 	menu
@@ -104,14 +104,14 @@ L_Explain:
 		"... talking?",L_Talk,
 		"... the inventory and items?",L_Items,
 		"... shortcuts?",L_Shortcut,
-		"... what to do in main Tulimshar?",L_Aidan,
+		"... what to do in Tulimshar?",L_Aidan,
 		"... nevermind.",L_Close;
 	close;
 
 L_Walk:
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
 	mes "\"You can use the arrow keys to walk around.";
-	mes "Or just click at the place you want to go to.";
+	mes "Or just click on the place you want to go to.";
 	mes "But this only works if that place is reachable and walkable.\"";
 	close;
 
@@ -141,22 +141,22 @@ L_Items:
 	next;
 	mes "\"Equipment items like Armors, Weapons, Accessories can be equipped for fashionable purposes or to raise your status.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"Miscellaneous items such as maggot slime, are used in creating other items, or just to trade and sell.\"";
+	mes "\"Miscellaneous items such as maggot slime, can be used in creating other items, or just to trade and sell.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"Press F3 to open your inventory.";
 	mes "When placing your cursor over an item there, you can see a box with some informations about that item.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"To use or equip an item, select it with clicking on it.";
+	mes "\"To use or equip an item, select it by clicking on it.";
 	mes "Then press Use or Equip.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_Shortcut:
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
-	mes "\"Press F8 to open your shortcut window.\"";
+	mes "\"Press F8  or click the Shortcut button in the bar at the upper right to open your shortcut window.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"You can select the item you want to put on a shortcut with your mouse and then click on the position in the shortcut window you want to place it.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"Now you can use or equip/unequip it with pressing the number of the shortcut.\"";
+	mes "\"Now you can use or equip/unequip it by pressing the number of the shortcut.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_Aidan:
@@ -171,7 +171,8 @@ L_Aidan:
 	mes "Just follow the street to the south and you'll reach the bazaar.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"I heard Aidan is looking for brave adventurers, you might want to talk to him.";
-	mes "Usually the bazaar is bustling with activity, there are many persons who might know something useful.\"";
+	mes "Usually the bazaar is bustling with activity, there are many people who can help. ";
+	mes "Talk to everybody.  You can never tell when they might know something useful.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_Hasan:
@@ -180,21 +181,21 @@ L_Hasan:
 	mes "She shakes her head.";
 	next;
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
-	mes "\This guy was a plague ever since. He's always causing trouble.\"";
+	mes "\This guy has been a plague ever since he could walk. He's always causing trouble.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"And his father... Well, one day his father thought he should teach Hasan a lesson.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"He took him in the desert and then left him there!";
+	mes "\"He took him into the desert and then left him there!";
 	mes "Hasan was only seven years old!\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"I never understood how someone can do something like that to a child, even if it's a rascal like Hasan.\"";
+	mes "\"I never understood how someone could do something like that to a child, even if it's a rascal like Hasan.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"Anyway, Hasan tried to find his way back home, but stumbled in a nest of scorpions!\"";
+	mes "\"Anyway, Hasan tried to find his way back home, but stumbled into a nest of scorpions!\"";
 	mes "She shakes her head.";
 	next;
-	mes "\"If Valon wouldn't have come along that moment, Hasan would have died that day.\"";
+	mes "\"If Valon hadn't have come along that moment, Hasan would have died that day.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"However, the scorpions poison caused a bad fever and after Hasan had recovered from that, he was even more malicious than before.\"";
+	mes "\"However, the scorpions poison caused a bad fever and once Hasan had recovered from that, he was even more malicious than before.\"";
 	mes "She sighs.";
 	if (hasan == 1)
 		set hasan, 2;
@@ -202,13 +203,13 @@ L_Hasan:
 
 L_SkipTut:
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
-	mes "\"Really? You seem quite unexperienced. Listening to some advices won't hurt.\"";
+	mes "\"Really? You seem quite unexperienced. Listening to some advice won't hurt.\"";
 	next;
 	menu
 		"Thinking about it twice... please tell me.",L_Tut,
 		"Yeah, but thanks for the offer. Bye.",-;
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
-	mes "\"If you think so. But take at least this.";
+	mes "\"Alright, if you say so. But take at least this.";
 	set hasan, 0;
 	set kaan, 0;
 	set sorfina, 0;
@@ -265,9 +266,9 @@ L_Shirt:
 	mes "[Sorfina]";
 	mes "\"Great! Now you can equip it.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"You can open your inventory with pressing F3 or clicking at the button 'Inventory' in the bar at the upper right corner.\"";
+	mes "\"You can open your inventory by pressing F3 or clicking on the 'Inventory' button in the bar at the upper right corner.\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"After we finished talking click on the shirt and press the equip button.\"";
+	mes "\"After we finish talking, click on the shirt and press the equip button.\"";
 	set sorfina, 3;
 	close;