Spelling, grammar, formatting corrections for love triangle quest.

1 files changed, 10 insertions, 10 deletions

diff --git a/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/crying_child.txt b/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/crying_child.txt
index 045a4cd6..1fad1261 100644
--- a/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/crying_child.txt
+++ b/npc/027-2_Caretakers_House/crying_child.txt
@@ -30,14 +30,14 @@
 
 L_cry:
 	mes "[Crying Child]";
-	mes "\"Waaahhhhh! (Sniffle)\"";
+	mes "\"Waaahhhhh! *sniffle*\"";
 	close;
 
 L_intro:
 	mes "[Crying Child]";
 	mes "\"Waaah!\"";
 	next;
-	mes "\"(Sniffle)\"";
+	mes "\"*Sniffle*\"";
 	next;
 	menu
 		"Calm down kid, what happened?",-,
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ L_intro:
 	menu
 		"My name is "+strcharinfo(0)+", I heard you cry and decided to ask if you need help.",-;
 	mes "[Crying Child]";
-	mes "\"My parents told me not to talk to strangers... But you look nice... I trust you... I'm Aldred and we live here, my parents and me. This is our inn.\"";
+	mes "\"My parents told me not to talk to strangers... But you look nice... I guess I can trust you... I'm Aldred and we live here, my parents and me. This is our inn.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "[Aldred]";
 	mes "\"My problem is... I don't know what to do... My dad will be so angry with me... He is very nice, but when you do something wrong... he... WAAAAAAH!\"";
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ L_intro:
 	menu
 		"Here, here, don't cry... What did you do?",-;
 	mes "[Aldred]";
-	mes "\"Err.. I was looking at my parents stuff and I found this funny thing! It looks like a big blue beetle... I thought it would be funny to play with it for a while, so I took it with me. But I... sniffle... I lost it...\"";
+	mes "\"Err.. I was looking at my parents stuff and I found this funny thing! It looks like a big blue beetle... I thought it would be fun to play with it for a while, so I took it with me. But I... *sniffle*... I lost it...\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"I don't know what happened. I was outside and... maybe it fell on the ground! I am so scared! What if someone picked it up? It could be anyone!\"";
 	next;
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ L_intro:
 
 L_return:
 	mes "[Aldred]";
-	mes "\"Please, help me " +@madamsir$+ ". What will I say If my father asks me why I'm crying?\"";
+	mes "\"Please, help me " +@madamsir$+ ". What will I say if my father asks me why I'm crying?\"";
 	close;
 
 
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ L_return1:
 		"Err... kind of...",-;
 	next;
 	mes "[Aldred]";
-	mes "\"Now I will put this thing in its right place... Thank you!\"";
+	mes "\"Now I will put this thing back in its proper place... Thank you!\"";
 	set @state, 3;
 	callsub S_Update_Mask;
 	close;
@@ -98,13 +98,13 @@ L_return1:
 
 L_return2:
 	mes "[Aldred]";
-	mes "\"Hi "+strcharinfo(0)+ "! I was thinking... you were sooo nice helping me find the beetle... I think I should give you a gift, but I am only a child, I have nothing to give you!\"";
+	mes "\"Hi "+strcharinfo(0)+ "! I was thinking... you were sooo nice helping me find the beetle... I think I should give you a gift, but I'm just a kid, I have nothing to give you!\"";
 	next;
 	menu
 		"Don't worry, you don't need to give me anything...",-;
 	next;
 	mes "[Aldred]";
-	mes "\"Are you serious? That is why you are so great! But hey, I have an idea. What if you talk to my parents about this item? If it is not important or valuable, I think there is no problem to let you keep it.\"";
+	mes "\"Are you serious? That is why you are so great! But hey, I have an idea. What if you talk to my parents about this item? If it is not important or valuable, I don't think it would be a problem to let you keep it.\"";
 	next;
 	menu
 		"Sounds interesting... But who are your parents?",-,
@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@ L_return2:
 	mes "\"Ok, great... But please, don't tell them about it. I don't want my parents to know I was playing with their stuff. My father is always carrying a lantern... I guess he is still afraid of the dark. My mother is the innkeeper. She is very beautiful and today she is wearing a red dress.\"";
 	next;
 	mes "\"Don't forget to come back with the beetle after you talk to my parents.\"";
-	message strcharinfo(0), "Aldred hands you the strange item and you keep it in a small compartment of your backpack";
+	message strcharinfo(0), "Aldred hands you the strange item and you keep it in a small pocket of your backpack";
 	close;
 
 L_return3:
@@ -147,7 +147,7 @@ L_return4:
 	getitem "ScarabArmlet", 1;
 	set @state, 7;
 	callsub S_Update_Mask;
-	mes "\"Now I will tell my parents how great and helpfull you are... Maybe they can even let you stay here at the inn for free!\"";
+	mes "\"I will tell my parents how great and helpful you are. Maybe they can even let you stay here at the inn for free!\"";
 	close;
 
 L_return5: