Language and friendlifying newbie quests with timing tips.

Also a minor bugfix to Nickos.

1 files changed, 8 insertions, 8 deletions

diff --git a/npc/001-1_Tulimshar/children.txt b/npc/001-1_Tulimshar/children.txt
index 701fe2b6..c8941563 100644
--- a/npc/001-1_Tulimshar/children.txt
+++ b/npc/001-1_Tulimshar/children.txt
@@ -1,4 +1,4 @@
-//
+// Aisha and Nina
 
 001-1.gat,95,29,0	script	Aisha	108,{
 	set @TEMP,rand(9);
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ L_6:
 
 L_7:
 	mes "[Aisha]";
-	mes "\"I want to be a Doctor when i grow up!\"";
+	mes "\"I want to be a Doctor when I grow up!\"";
 	close;
 
 L_8:
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ L_4:
 	close;
 
 L_5:
-	mes "\"I always take some spare Cactus Juices with me on the field.  They are heavy, though.\"";
+	mes "\"I always take some spare [Cactus Juice]s with me on the field.  They are heavy, though.\"";
 	close;
 
 L_6:
@@ -101,7 +101,7 @@ L_8:
 	close;
 
 L_9:
-	mes "\"I know a very bad word. But I must not say it, because monsters will come and get me if I do!\"";
+	mes "\"I know a very bad word.  But I must not say it, because monsters will come and get me if I do!\"";
         next;
 	menu
 		"A bad word?", L_tell,
@@ -110,10 +110,10 @@ L_9:
 
 L_tell:
 	mes "[Nina]";
-	mes "\"Yes, I heard my mother say it once. And she made me promise her to never say it. Never.\"";
+	mes "\"Yes, I heard my mother say it once.  And she made me promise her to never say it.  Never.\"";
 	next;
 	menu	"If I promise to never tell anyone, can you tell me the word?", L_keepword,
-		"I understand, you do not need to tell...", L_giveword,
+		"I understand, you do not need to tell me...", L_giveword,
 		"Goodbye!", -;
 	close;
 
@@ -124,8 +124,8 @@ L_keepword:
 
 L_giveword:
 	mes "[Nina]";
-	mes "Nina looks around as she hushes you to silence. After a few seconds she whispers to you.";
-	mes "\"I like you! So I will tell you the bad word.  But you can't tell anyone else about it! The bad word is '" + getspellinvocation("aggravate") + "'.\"";
+	mes "Nina looks around as she hushes you to silence.  After a few seconds, she whispers to you.";
+	mes "\"I like you!  So I will tell you the bad word.  But you can't tell anyone else about it!  The bad word is '" + getspellinvocation("aggravate") + "'.\"";
         next;
 
 	mes "[Nina]";