NPC Improvements

1 files changed, 14 insertions, 13 deletions

diff --git a/npc/003-1/hasan.txt b/npc/003-1/hasan.txt
index 11df5e8ce..08d9cacdb 100644
--- a/npc/003-1/hasan.txt
+++ b/npc/003-1/hasan.txt
@@ -2,20 +2,20 @@
 // Author:
 //  Jesusalva
 // Description:
-//  Hasan is the city bully and steals the player. He lost his father to a Murderer
-//  Scorpion. Will respect player if they kill one. His mother is Sorfina, whom
-//  explains this and cries that he never touched a Soul Menhir. Allowing player
-//  to kill scorpion on Mahoud's Basement.
+//  Hasan is the city bully and steals from the player. He lost his father to a Murderer
+//  Scorpion. Will respect player if they kill one. His mother is Sorfina, who
+//  explains this and cries that he never touched a Soul Menhir. Allows the player
+//  to kill the scorpion on Mahoud's Basement.
 //
 //  Player must report theft first to Dausen, who will tell the player that's
-//  normal and nobody messes with Hasan, and giving player pointer that he should
+//  normal and nobody messes with Hasan, and giving player a pointer that they should
 //  tell his mother, Sorfina.
 //
-//  Reward: Cotton Short, Hasan won't steal you anymore.
+//  Reward: Cotton Short, Hasan won't steal from you anymore.
 //
 //  GETQ1 Variable Value;
-//  0 - Never stolen by Hasan
-//  1 - Already stolen by Hasan
+//  0 - Hasan has never stolen from the player
+//  1 - Hasan already stole from the player
 //  2 - Dausen pointed player to Sorfina
 //  3 - Sorfina unlocked Mahoud's Basement
 //  4 - Player killed Murderer Scorpion
@@ -37,7 +37,7 @@
     if (getq(TulimsharQuest_Hasan) == 4) goto L_Finish;
     if (getq(TulimsharQuest_Hasan) >= 5) goto L_Complete;
     mesn strcharinfo(0);
-    mesq l("Give me back what you've stole, thief!");
+    mesq l("Give me back what you stole, thief!");
     next;
     mesn;
     mesq l("I stole nothing from you. Do you have any proof?");
@@ -62,16 +62,17 @@ L_Print:
     mesq l("Photoshopped. Definitely. Good luck convincing somebody with that! %%a");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("If you go to Lieutenant Dausen, he'll say that you used Gimp. Just give up.");
+    mesq l("If you go to Lieutenant Dausen, he'll say that you used GIMP. Just give up.");
     close;
 
 // TODO
 L_Finish:
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Is that... Wait... Wow. You... Killed a murderer scorpion.");
+    // The scorpion and not a scorpion because of dramatic buildup.
+    mesq l("Is that... Wait... Wow. You... Killed the murderer scorpion.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("I promise I'll never steal from you again. Here, take this shorts.");
+    mesq l("I promise I'll never steal from you again. Here, take these shorts.");
     mesq l("Good job, man!");
     setq TulimsharQuest_Hasan, 5;
     getitem CottonShorts, 1;
@@ -164,7 +165,7 @@ OnTouch:
     end;
 
 L_Steal:
-    npctalkonce(l("*whistle*"));
+    npctalkonce(l("*whistles*"));
     if (getq(TulimsharQuest_Hasan) == 0) goto L_DoSteal;
     if (getq(TulimsharQuest_Hasan) <= 4 && rand(0,100) < 20) goto L_DoSteal;
     end;