NPC Improvements

1 files changed, 16 insertions, 15 deletions

diff --git a/npc/000-0-0/sailors.txt b/npc/000-0-0/sailors.txt
index d13802f85..629d58ec3 100644
--- a/npc/000-0-0/sailors.txt
+++ b/npc/000-0-0/sailors.txt
@@ -3,6 +3,7 @@
 //    Jesusalva
 // Description:
 //    Tutorial
+// TODO: Do not hardcode keyboard keys. The player may have changed the keyboard or even mouse bindings.
 
 000-0-0,30,34,0	script	Elmo#sailors	NPC_ELMO,{
 OnBegin:
@@ -98,23 +99,23 @@ L_Step3:
     setcamnpc;
     showavatar NPC_ELMO;
     mesn "Elmo";
-    mesq l("You learn fast, good job. These clothes aren't a mighty armor, but they'll help.");
+    mesq l("You learn fast, good job. These clothes aren't mighty armor, but they'll help.");
     next;
     mesn "Elmo";
-    mesq l("Let's jump straight to action, shall we? I'll spawn a mighty @@ to fight you!", getmonsterlink(Dummy));
+    mesq l("Let's jump straight to action, shall we? I'll build a mighty @@ to fight you!", getmonsterlink(Dummy));
     next;
     mesn "Elmo";
     mesq l("On a computer, you can press @@ to attack it. On mobile, that would be the big button with the number 1.", b(l("Ctrl")));
     next;
     mesn "Elmo";
-    mesq l("Another way to attack it is clicking on it. Now, there are some things you must know before fighting this dangerous creature!");
+    mesq l("Another way to attack it is clicking on it. Now, there are some things you must know before fighting this truly dangerous foe!");
     next;
     showavatar NPC_MAGIC_ARPAN;
     mesn l("Magic Arpan");
-    mesq l("Yayaya, by pressing @@ or clicking in @@, you'll open your char status window!", b(l("F2")), b(l("STA")));
+    mesq l("Yayaya, by pressing @@ or clicking in @@, you'll open your character status window!", b(l("F2")), b(l("STA")));
     next;
     mesn l("Magic Arpan");
-    mesq l("You should allocate some attributes to it. You need @@, @@ and @@, on this order of importance.", b(l("Agility")), b(l("Dexterity")), b(l("Strength"))); // b(l("")),
+    mesq l("You should allocate some attributes. You need @@, @@ and @@, on this order of importance.", b(l("Agility")), b(l("Dexterity")), b(l("Strength"))); // b(l("")),
     next;
     mesn l("Magic Arpan");
     mesq l("Once you allocate status points, you can fight it! Good luck, @@!", strcharinfo(0));
@@ -140,24 +141,24 @@ L_Step4:
     percentheal 100,100;
     mesn "Elmo";
     mesq l("Did something happen?");
-    mesc l("This is a menu, click on the option and then on send. You can use arrow keys if you prefer.");
+    mesc l("This is a menu, click on the option and then on submit. You can use arrow keys if you prefer.");
     mes "";
     select
         l(">.< \"The Dummy is a real killer!\""),
         l("T.T \"Someone else killed my Dummy!\""),
-        l("'.' \"I forgot how to allocate status!\""),
+        l("'.' \"I forgot how to allocate points!\""),
         l("-.- \"I forgot how to fight!\""),
-        l("._. \"What are these status useful for?\""),
+        l("._. \"What are these statuses useful for?\""),
         l("^.^ \"Nothing is wrong, don't worry!\"");
 
     mes "";
     switch (@menu) {
         case 1:
             mesn "Elmo";
-            mesq l("Well, you clearly don't have a weapon. So, let me explain some quick.");
+            mesq l("Well, you don't have a weapon. So, let me explain quickly.");
             next;
             mesn "Elmo";
-            mesq l("Don't be afraid of death. Of course, in most places, dying will reduce your Experience.");
+            mesq l("Don't be afraid of death. Of course, in most places, dying will make you lose some Experience you gathered.");
             next;
             mesn "Elmo";
             mesq l("But you don't have any experience at the moment, so what do you have to lose?");
@@ -166,7 +167,7 @@ L_Step4:
             mesq l("Try killing it, and if it kills you, just come back from death to continue killing it.");
             mes l("What I want to say is: Kill non-stop!");
             next;
-            mesc l("Actually, the Dummy don't fight back. Are you afraid?");
+            mesc l("Actually, the Dummy will not fight back. Are you afraid?");
             break;
         case 2:
             .@mct=mobcount("000-0-0", "Elmo#sailors::OnStep4");
@@ -213,7 +214,7 @@ L_Step4:
             mes l("Your @@ determines several small things, including critical attacks and, limited to a certain extent, affect drop rates.", b(l("luck")));
             next;
             mesn "Elmo";
-            mes l("But to defeat this dummy, I would say that %s should do the trick.", b(l("assigning 5 points to str, agi, dex and luck")));
+            mes l("But to defeat this dummy, I would say that %s should do the trick.", b(l("assigning 5 points each to str, agi, dex and luck")));
             break;
     }
     close;
@@ -256,7 +257,7 @@ L_Skip:
 
 L_Ready:
     #TUTORIAL_DONE=true;
-    //clearitem(); // The dummy don't drop anything :>
+    //clearitem(); // The dummy does not drop anything :>
     resetlvl(2);
     restorecam;
     setq General_Narrator, 0;
@@ -273,12 +274,12 @@ L_Ready:
 // Prevent players from forgetting what they were meant to do
 // But if they logout, this will never trigger
 OnSlow:
-    npctalk3 l("Hey @@! You haven't clicked on me yet!", strcharinfo(0));
+    npctalk3 l("Hey @@! You haven't talked to me yet!", strcharinfo(0));
     addtimer(30000,"Elmo#sailors::OnSlow2");
     end;
 
 OnSlow2:
-    npctalk3 l("@@, do you need help? Are you lost? Click me!", strcharinfo(0));
+    npctalk3 l("@@, do you need help? Are you lost? Talk to me!", strcharinfo(0));
     dispbottom l("Click on Elmo or Magic Arpan to continue and begin the game...");
     addtimer(60000,"Elmo#sailors::OnSlow");
     end;