Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing

All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna.

2 files changed, 18 insertions, 18 deletions

diff --git a/world/map/npc/012-1/flowerpentagram2.txt b/world/map/npc/012-1/flowerpentagram2.txt
index 440d2571..d719ad00 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/012-1/flowerpentagram2.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/012-1/flowerpentagram2.txt
@@ -7,11 +7,11 @@
     if (OrumQuest > 20) goto L_PlacedSecondFlower;
     if (OrumQuest == 20) goto L_SecondFlower;
 
-    message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place.";
+    message strcharinfo(0), "There is something odd about this place.";
     end;
 
 L_SecondFlower:
-    mes "Orum described this place. Here you have to place the second magical flower.";
+    mes "Orum described this place. You have to place the second magical flower here.";
     menu
         "Place the flower.", -,
         "Leave.", L_Close;
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_SecondFlower:
     if (isin("012-1.gat", 142, 69, 144, 71))
         goto L_Place;
 
-    mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away.";
+    mes "This isn't working, you're too far away.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Place:
@@ -35,8 +35,8 @@ L_Place:
     if (countitem("PurpleSummonFlower") < 1)
         goto L_NoFlower;
     delitem "PurpleSummonFlower", 1;
-    mes "Remembering what happened last time, you take a careful look around. Everything's calm. You proceed and place the second flower.";
-    mes "Tension builds up around you. You're alarmed.";
+    mes "Remembering what happened the last time, you take a careful look around. Everything's calm. You proceed to place the second flower.";
+    mes "Sensing a certain tension build up around you, you can't help but feel alarmed.";
     set OrumQuest, 21;
     close2;
     areamonster "012-1.gat", 140, 64, 146, 73, "", 1105, 2, "#FlowerPentagram2::OnSquirrelDeath";
@@ -70,24 +70,24 @@ OnRScorpionDeath:
 
 L_MonstersAlive:
     mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence.";
-    mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!";
+    mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!";
     next;
     mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_NoFlower:
     mes "You look into your pocket, but the flower isn't there. Where did you put it?";
-    mes "If you can't find it again, better talk to Orum.";
+    mes "If you can't find it, you should talk to Orum again.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedSecondFlower:
-    mes "On this spot you placed the second of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "There's a slight glowing of magic power around the place, waiting to be unleashed.";
+    mes "You placed the second of Orum's magical flowers on this spot.";
+    mes "You can still feel the magical power shimmering around this place, waiting to be unleashed.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_PlacedFifthFlower:
-    mes "This is the place where you put the second of Orum's magical flowers.";
-    mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot.";
+    mes "This is where you placed the second of Orum's magical flowers.";
+    mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here.";
     goto L_Close;
 
 L_Close:
diff --git a/world/map/npc/012-1/shops.txt b/world/map/npc/012-1/shops.txt
index b15b2c3d..ac627e1f 100644
--- a/world/map/npc/012-1/shops.txt
+++ b/world/map/npc/012-1/shops.txt
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
     menu
         "Sure.", L_Shop,
         "Not right now.", L_Close,
-        "Can I trade this Rose Hat against a different one?", L_RoseHat;
+        "Can I trade this Rose Hat for a differently colored one?", L_RoseHat;
 
 L_Shop:
     shop "#FlowerShop";
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ L_RoseHat:
         "A white one.", -,
         "A pink one.", -,
         "A yellow one.", -,
-        "A orange one.", -,
+        "An orange one.", -,
         "A blue one.", -;
     set @have_id, @base_id + @menu - 1;
 
@@ -34,7 +34,7 @@ L_RoseHat:
         "A white one.", -,
         "A pink one.", -,
         "A yellow one.", -,
-        "A orange one.", -,
+        "An orange one.", -,
         "A blue one.", -;
     set @receive_id, @base_id + @menu - 1;
 
@@ -51,17 +51,17 @@ L_RoseHat:
 L_NoItem:
     mes "[Blossom]";
     mes "\"Oh, you don't have a Rose Hat in that color.";
-    mes "Did you mean something else?\"";
+    mes "Did you mean a different color?\"";
     menu
         "Yes, I meant a different color.", L_RoseHat,
         "No, I changed my mind.", L_Close;
 
 L_SameColor:
     mes "[Blossom]";
-    mes "\"Oh, but it doesn't make sense to trade agains the same color.";
-    mes "Did you mean something else?\"";
+    mes "\"Oh, you already have a hat in that color.";
+    mes "Did you want something else?\"";
     menu
-        "Yes, let me correct.", L_RoseHat,
+        "Yes, let me pick a different color.", L_RoseHat,
         "No, I changed my mind.", L_Close;
 
 L_Close: