From 5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Dino Paskvan Date: Mon, 15 Jul 2013 16:05:44 +0200 Subject: Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna. --- world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt | 22 +++++++++++----------- 1 file changed, 11 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt') diff --git a/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt b/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt index 364963c1..10bf0539 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/055-1/flowerpentagram4.txt @@ -7,11 +7,11 @@ if (OrumQuest > 26) goto L_PlacedFourthFlower; if (OrumQuest == 26) goto L_FourthFlower; - message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd with this place."; + message strcharinfo(0), "Something is odd about this place."; end; L_FourthFlower: - mes "This is the spot to place the fourth of Orum's magical flowers."; + mes "This is the spot where you have to place the fourth of Orum's magical flowers."; menu "Place the flower.", -, "Leave.", L_Close; @@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ L_FourthFlower: if (isin("055-1.gat", 140, 88, 142, 90)) goto L_Place; - mes "This doesn't work, you're too far away."; + mes "This isn't working, you're too far away."; goto L_Close; L_Place: @@ -39,8 +39,8 @@ L_Place: if (countitem("YellowSummonFlower") < 1) goto L_NoFlower; delitem "YellowSummonFlower", 1; - mes "Worried about what will leak from the astral plane this time, you prepare yourself and put the flower in place."; - mes "As expected you feel the magical tension building up. They're coming."; + mes "Worried about what will shift from the astral plane this time, you prepare yourself and put the flower in place."; + mes "As expected, you feel the magical tension building up. They're coming."; set OrumQuest, 27; close2; areamonster "055-1.gat", 133, 87, 144, 99, "", 1105, 1, "#FlowerPentagram4::OnSquirrelDeath"; @@ -98,24 +98,24 @@ OnBScorpionDeath: L_MonstersAlive: mes "As you get closer to the place, you feel an unnerving presence."; - mes "The place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still near!"; + mes "This place has recently been used to summon something! And the beings are still nearby!"; next; mes "You should get rid of them before attempting the summoning yourself."; goto L_Close; L_NoFlower: mes "You search your belongings for the magical flower. Where is it?"; - mes "If you lost it, you should talk to Orum."; + mes "If you lost it, you should talk to Orum again."; goto L_Close; L_PlacedFourthFlower: - mes "Here you put the fourth of Orum's magical flowers."; - mes "There's a slight glowing of magic power around the place, waiting to be unleashed when you put the last one into place."; + mes "You placed the fourth of Orum's magical flowers here."; + mes "You can still feel the magical power shimmering around this place, waiting to be unleashed."; goto L_Close; L_PlacedFifthFlower: - mes "This is the place where you put the fourth of Orum's magical flowers."; - mes "But after the pentagram was finished and the summoning happened, everything is back to normal with this spot."; + mes "This is where you placed the fourth of Orum's magical flowers."; + mes "However, now that the summoning spell has been cast, everything is back to normal here."; goto L_Close; L_Close: -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50