From 2ed796ed16b76094293e492973820d1d90623a29 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Frost Date: Mon, 23 Jan 2012 12:27:30 -0800 Subject: Minor grammar edits to birrod, kimarr, and yerrnk --- world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt | 38 +++++++++++++++++++------------------- 1 file changed, 19 insertions(+), 19 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt') diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt index 8cb9e13d..64238524 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/yerrnk.txt @@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ mes "[Barbarian]"; mes "\"Hello. I'm Yerrnk, first warrior of the Mangarr.\""; next; - mes "Yerrnk looks at you in a reserved way."; + mes "Yerrnk looks at you cautiously."; mes "[Yerrnk]"; mes "\"Please take care of your own business.\""; goto L_Close; @@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ L_Fluffy: mes "He sighs."; next; mes "[Yerrnk]"; - mes "\"Are you going to accept Kimarr's task? It's an ancient ceremony in our tribe. A young member is accepted as an adult when completing it.\""; + mes "\"Are you going to accept Kimarr's task? It's an ancient ceremony in our tribe. A young member is accepted as an adult after completing it.\""; goto L_Close; L_Kimarr: @@ -39,32 +39,32 @@ L_Duty: mes "[Yerrnk]"; mes "\"I'm not sure if you are aware about the meaning of your actions.\""; next; - mes "\"You passed the inition ritus for hunters of our tribe. That means now you are a hunter of our tribe, with all the rights and duties that come along with that.\""; + mes "\"You passed the initiation rite for hunters of our tribe. That means now you are a hunter of our tribe, with all the rights and duties that come along with that.\""; next; - mes "\"So you'll have to obey our laws and traditions, protect and help any member of our tribe that is in need and never show weakness nor fear in battle.\""; + mes "\"So you'll have to obey our laws and traditions, protect and help any member of our tribe that is in need, and show neither weakness nor fear in battle.\""; next; - mes "\"Keep this in mind. If you fail you'll have to recieve the elders judgement.\""; + mes "\"Keep this in mind. If you fail you'll have to receive the elders' judgement.\""; goto L_Close; L_Sorrow: mes "[Yerrnk]"; mes "\"I noticed that you're getting along with Kimarr and Birrod very well. That's good.\""; - mes "He smiles, but then an expression of worry gets back to his face."; + mes "He smiles, but then an expression of worry returns to his face."; next; L_Mission: mes "[Yerrnk]"; - mes "\"Our tribe is going through dire straits. We used to live in harmony with the mountain ever since."; + mes "\"Our tribe is going through dire times. We have lived in harmony with the mountain since time beyond memory."; mes "Life is hard in the snowy mountains, but this life suits our nature.\""; next; - mes "\"Some weeks ago the Yetis started to act very strange. Usually they are very shy, but now..."; + mes "\"Some weeks ago the Yetis started to act very strangely. Usually they are very shy, but now...."; mes "They left the secluded areas high up in the mountains they used to live on and started roaming our hunting grounds.\""; next; mes "\"It became very dangerous to leave the village, so it's even harder to gather enough food to survive."; - mes "But not only this, the Yetis are getting more daring every day - they might attack the village itself sooner or later.\""; + mes "Not only this, but the Yetis are getting more daring every day. They might attack the village itself sooner or later.\""; next; - mes "\"Other wild animals got more aggressive as well, though the Yetis are the most dangerous."; - mes "Something like that has never happened before. We have no idea what could cause the animals to behave like this.\""; + mes "\"Other wild animals are more aggressive as well, though the Yetis are the most dangerous."; + mes "Something like this has never happened before. We have no idea what could cause the animals to behave like this.\""; next; mes "\"That's why we were sent on a mission to find and talk to Santa, one of the Sages of Kaizei."; mes "The Sages are wizards of great power and wisdom, and we hope Santa might be able to give us advice.\""; @@ -73,11 +73,11 @@ L_Mission: L_Birrod: mes "[Yerrnk]"; mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", I have to admit that I'm surprised by your skills."; - mes "You've proved your braveness and strength.\""; + mes "You've proven your bravery and strength.\""; next; if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0) goto L_Not_Ready; - mes "\"Please talk to Birrod to receive the initiation ritual to become a warrior of the Mangarr.\""; + mes "\"Please talk to Birrod to receive the initiation rite to become a warrior of the Mangarr.\""; menu "Alright.",-, "Can you tell me again what you are here for?",L_Mission; @@ -97,7 +97,7 @@ L_Warrior: mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", welcome back!"; mes "Do you have any question?\""; menu - "Everything's alright, thanks.",-, + "Everything's all right, thanks.",-, "What are you doing down here?",L_Mission, "Can you explain the Raging ability to me?",L_Skill, "Do you have a task for me?",L_Task; @@ -108,14 +108,14 @@ L_Skill: mes "\"As a warrior of our tribe it should be the most important thing to you to defend weaker members of the tribe."; mes "To achieve this goal our warriors are training the skill to stand the pain of being hit and even use it to get into a state of rage.\""; next; - mes "\"It only works in a melee fight, when you hear your opponent gasping, smell his sweat, and feel the heat of his body.\""; + mes "\"It works only in a melee fight, when you hear your opponent gasping, smell his sweat, and feel the heat of his body.\""; next; - mes "Yerrnk gets excited, then he pauses a moment calming down."; - mes "\"Basically its a neglect of your own defense but therefor being able to hit the enemy with outstanding might.\""; + mes "Yerrnk gets excited, then he pauses a moment to calm down."; + mes "\"Basically you neglect of your own defense but gain the ability to hit your enemy with outstanding might.\""; next; mes "[Yerrnk]"; - mes "\"You can imagine that this comprises some danger. That's why we usually fight as a group, so a weakened warrior can step back and recover while the others keep the fight."; - mes "It's also beneficial to have a healer, but very few members of our tribe are born with the capability to wield magic.\""; + mes "\"You can imagine that this creates some danger. That's why we usually fight as a group, so a weakened warrior can step back and recover while the others continue to fight."; + mes "It's also beneficial to have a healer, but very few members of our tribe are born with the ability to wield magic.\""; goto L_Close; L_Task: -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50