From 5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Dino Paskvan Date: Mon, 15 Jul 2013 16:05:44 +0200 Subject: Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna. --- world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt | 32 ++++++++++++++++---------------- 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 16 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt') diff --git a/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt b/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt index b6e38d0d..c3f2ebc8 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/017-4/guardingspirit.txt @@ -9,41 +9,41 @@ L_Talk: goto L_Chat; mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"Hold on! My master doesn't wish to get disturbed! I can't let you enter.\""; + mes "\"Hold there! My master does not wish to be disturbed! I cannot let you enter.\""; menu "Who is your master?", L_Master, "But I have important things I need to discuss with your master!", L_Helped, "Oh, so he's finally back?", L_Back, - "Ok, ok.", L_Close; + "Okay, okay.", L_Close; L_Back: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"Yeah, finally... He was gone for quite a while, and now he came back with this scary and quainty guy...\""; + mes "\"Yes, he was gone for quite a while. When he arrived home, he had a rather frightening looking guy with him.\""; next; - mes "\"Ehem, I mean. Yes, mortal. He came back into his residence and doesn't wish to interact with those below his dignity. Leave.\""; + mes "\"Ahem, I mean, yes Mortal. He came back to his residence and does not wish to interact with those below his status. Leave!\""; goto L_Close; L_Master: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"He's a powerful wizard. He can force the elements to obey his will. He talks to demons and higher beings from the astral plane, such as I am.\""; + mes "\"He is a powerful wizard. He can force the very elements to obey his will! He regularly communes with demons and higher beings from the astral plane, such as myself.\""; next; - mes "\"Mankind knows him with under the name 'Orum'.\""; + mes "\"Mankind knows his name as 'Orum'.\""; menu "Hey, I helped him out some while ago!", L_Helped, - "Orum? That guy who feels weary due to some transmution spells?", L_Disrespectful, + "Orum? That guy who feels weary due to some transmutation spells?", L_Disrespectful, "Then I better respect his wish and leave!", L_Close; L_Disrespectful: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"WHAT are you saying? Are you making fun of my master?! You'll regret that!\""; + mes "\"What are you saying? Who are you to mock my Master?! You will regret that!\""; set Hp, 1 + Hp/5; goto L_Close; L_Helped: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"Really? That sounds unplausible to me...\""; + mes "\"Really? That sounds implausible to me.\""; next; - mes "\"Why should my master mess around with such a puny mortal as you are?\""; + mes "\"Why would my master mess around with such a puny mortal as yourself?\""; menu "I'd like to offer him my humble services...", L_Pass, "Listen, he'll get angry if you don't let me pass. ", L_Pass, @@ -51,25 +51,25 @@ L_Helped: L_Pass: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"Mh. Mh... All right, I let you pass.\""; + mes "\"Alright, I will let you pass.\""; next; - mes "\"Remember to talk to him with befitting respect.\""; + mes "\"Remember that when you speak with him, do so with respect for someone befitting his status.\""; set OrumQuest, 15; warp "017-4.gat", 201, 26; goto L_Close; L_Block: mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"Stop, mortal! I can't let you pass!\""; + mes "\"Stop, mortal! I cannot let you pass!\""; menu "What? Who are you?", -, "Why?", -, "Ok...", L_Close; mes "[Guarding Spirit]"; - mes "\"My master summoned me for the sole purpose to prevent his refuge being entered during his absence."; - mes "I'll guard this cave with all my power!\""; + mes "\"My master summoned me for the sole purpose of preventing anyone else from entering his refuge."; + mes "I'll stand guard and protect it with all my power!\""; next; - mes "\"Because... otherwise he'll punish me. That hurts.\""; + mes "\"If I fail, he will punish me. I do not like being punished by his magic, it hurts.\""; goto L_Close; L_Chat: -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50