From c05f662f2e2576eaed8bbf459e579d447b6b99c8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: The Kandiman Date: Sat, 18 Jun 2011 01:54:53 -0400 Subject: Initial spell/grammar check for tutorial --- npc/042-1/kaan.txt | 36 ++++++++++++++++++------------------ 1 file changed, 18 insertions(+), 18 deletions(-) (limited to 'npc/042-1/kaan.txt') diff --git a/npc/042-1/kaan.txt b/npc/042-1/kaan.txt index 494dc874..6b9e34ca 100644 --- a/npc/042-1/kaan.txt +++ b/npc/042-1/kaan.txt @@ -17,11 +17,11 @@ next; mes "\"She was babbling at me about it all the morning until I sent her to take care of the maggots in the storehouse.\""; next; - mes "Kaan grins mischievous"; + mes "Kaan grins mischieviously."; mes "[Kaan]"; mes "\"She hates maggots.\""; next; - mes "\"Maybe you should go to see her, she was really upset about what happened with you.\""; + mes "\"Maybe you should go and see her...she was really upset about what happened to you.\""; set kaan, 1; if (tanisha >= 3) goto L_Tanisha2; @@ -43,42 +43,42 @@ L_Tanisha: "Yeah, and she's done with the maggots.",-; L_Tanisha3: mes "[Kaan]"; - mes "\"Ah, that are good news."; + mes "\"Ah, that is good news."; mes "You know, we have a lot of problems with bugs here.\""; next; mes "\"If we don't watch out the maggots will eat all of our stocks."; mes "And the desert is crawling with scorpions."; mes "They also come here and you need to watch out not to step on them.\""; next; - mes "\"But I took care about that problem.\""; + mes "\"But I took care of that problem.\""; mes "He looks very proud."; next; mes "\"I build this fence to keep them out.\""; next; menu - "Impressive! Just a bit... skew.",-, + "Impressive! Just a bit... skewed.",-, "Wow, it looks very - ahm, unconventional.",-; mes "[Kaan]"; mes "\"Well, it keeps the scorpions out. That's all that matters.\""; next; - mes "\"Are you going to visit main Tulimshar?"; - mes "The bazaar there is a wondeful place! Traders, entertainers, adventurers - it's very exciting there.\""; + mes "\"Are you going to visit Tulimshar?"; + mes "The bazaar there is a wondeful place! Traders, entertainers, adventurers - it's very exciting.\""; next; mes "\"And Ian the trainer is hanging around there often. You should talk to him, he's a smart guy.\""; set kaan, 2; if (hasan) menu - "A guy named Hasan doesn't let me enter main Tulimshar.",L_Hasan, + "A guy named Hasan won't let me enter Tulimshar.",L_Hasan, "Thanks for the advice.",L_Close; close; L_Out: mes "[Kaan]"; - mes "\"Hello! How are you? Did you already visit main Tulimshar?\""; + mes "\"Hello! How are you? Did you already visit Tulimshar?\""; next; if (hasan) menu - "A guy named Hasan doesn't let me enter main Tulimshar.",L_Hasan, + "A guy named Hasan won't let me enter Tulimshar.",L_Hasan, "Not yet.",L_Close; menu "Not yet.",L_Close; @@ -86,18 +86,18 @@ L_Out: L_Hasan: mes "[Kaan]"; - mes "\"Hasan! That's crazy. He becomes more cheekily with every day."; + mes "\"Hasan! That's crazy. He becomes more cheeky with every day."; mes "I'd like to help you, but - I won't risk an open confrontation with him.\""; next; mes "\"Sometimes he just freaks out and then he's dangerous."; - mes "We should think about some trick. Ah, if I'd now what's his weak point.\""; + mes "We should think about some kind of trick. Ah, if only I knew his weak point.\""; next; - mes "\"He might listen to one of the adult men, but they're all off to work in main Tulimshar during the day.\""; + mes "\"He might listen to one of the adult men, but they're all off to work in Tulimshar during the day.\""; set kaan, 3; next; L_Trick: mes "[Kaan]"; - mes "\"Do you have an idea what Hasans weakness could be?"; + mes "\"Do you have any idea what Hasans weakness could be?"; if (hasan < 2) close; next; @@ -106,14 +106,14 @@ L_Trick: "No idea.",L_Close; mes "[Kaan]"; mes "\"Scorpions?! Right! How could I forget?"; - mes "When he was a child, he nearly died because he felt in a scorpion nest.\""; + mes "When he was a child, he nearly died because he fell into a scorpion nest.\""; next; L_Explain: mes "\"Ok, then here's the plan:"; mes "I will catch one of the scorpions that's coming to the fence from the desert.\""; next; mes "\"You'll go to Hasan and give me a sign when you're ready."; - mes "Let's say the sign is that you're scratching your head."; + mes "Lets say the sign is that you're scratching your head."; mes "I'll watch you from this point.\""; next; mes "\"When you give me the sign, I'll throw the scorpion down on him."; @@ -140,13 +140,13 @@ L_Hasan_Saved: mes "\"I told you to pass when he's distracted, not to fight the scorpion!"; mes "But maybe Hasan is thankful now?\""; next; - mes "\"Maybe you should talk to him again.\""; + mes "\"Why don't you talk to him again and see what he says.\""; close; L_Tut_Done: mes "[Kaan]"; mes "\"Hi there. I hope you enjoy your time in Tulimshar."; - mes "Hasan is a real troublemaker, but it seems he calmed down now.\""; + mes "Hasan can be a real troublemaker, but it seems like he has calmed down for now.\""; close; L_Run: -- cgit v1.2.3-70-g09d2