From 38cccd4ba9a2a13a421d9f3adc7e0402bfe8f3c4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: The Kandiman Date: Fri, 1 Jul 2011 16:25:10 -0400 Subject: Initial spell and grammar check for Rossy quest --- world/map/npc/009-2/olana.txt | 43 +++++++++++++++++++++---------------------- 1 file changed, 21 insertions(+), 22 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/009-2') diff --git a/world/map/npc/009-2/olana.txt b/world/map/npc/009-2/olana.txt index efb3058f..e19c3aeb 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/009-2/olana.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/009-2/olana.txt @@ -20,19 +20,19 @@ if (Rossy_Quest == 1 || Rossy_Quest == 2) goto L_Daughter; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Hello. Usually guests don't come here.\""; + mes "\"Hello. We don't usually get a lot of guests here.\""; next; - mes "\"My name is Olana, my father owns this inn. I'm living in Tulimshar, but came to Hurnscald on vacation with my two young daughters, Rossy and Julia.\""; + mes "\"My name is Olana and my father owns this inn. I live in Tulimshar, but came to Hurnscald on vacation with my two young daughters, Rossy and Julia.\""; if (baselevel < 50) close; next; - mes "\"I let my two lovely girls play in the woods nearby but they didn't come back yet!\""; + mes "\"I let my two lovely girls play in the woods nearby but they haven't come back yet!\""; next; mes "Olana suddenly looks very pale and starts to shiver."; next; - mes "\"Oh, I have a bad feeling about this whole situation... If you go to the forest near the swamps, can you see if you find my daughters? I need to know if they are safe.\""; + mes "\"I'm starting to get a bad feeling about this... If you go to the forest near the swamps, could you see if you can find my daughters? I need to know if they are safe!\""; menu "Sure, I can do that.", -, - "I am sorry, I don't usually go to this area", L_No; + "I am sorry, I don't usually go to that area.", L_No; set Rossy_Quest, 1; close; @@ -49,10 +49,10 @@ L_No: L_Help: mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Oh yes? Is Rossy alright? That's good. I'm relieved. But what about Julia?\""; + mes "\"Oh you did? That's good. I'm relieved. But what about Julia?\""; next; menu - "I didn't find Julia yet, sorry", -; + "I haven't found Julia yet, sorry.", -; mes "\"Ok. They must be playing hide and seek. Thanks again... I can't express how grateful I am.\""; set Rossy_Quest, 3; close; @@ -65,9 +65,9 @@ L_See: if (gotcherry == 1) goto L_Task; if (countitem("cherry") < 10) goto L_Worried; menu - "Hi, Rossy asked me to give you this. She says it is a gift from her and from Julia", -; + "Hi, Rossy asked me to give you this. She says it is a gift from both her and Julia.", -; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Ohhh... How sweet... Sometimes Rossy impress me with her kindness. Here. You are spending so much time helping us, and we give nothing back. Take this as a small reward. \""; + mes "\"Ohhh... How sweet... Sometimes Rossy impresses me with her kindness. Here...You are spending so much time helping us, and we give nothing back. Take this as a small reward. \""; delitem "cherry", 10; getexp 1000, 0; set zeny, zeny + 1000; @@ -83,7 +83,7 @@ L_Task: L_Cont: mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Would you mind giving this letter to my little Rossy? Today is the last day for her final exam, and I know my daughter. If I don't remind her, she will surely forget about it and flunk the exam. I would deliver it myself, but I can't walk, my knees...\""; + mes "\"Would you mind giving this letter to my little Rossy? Today is the last day for her final exam, and I know my daughter. If I don't remind her, she will surely forget about it and flunk the exam. I would deliver the letter myself, but I can't walk, my aching knees...\""; menu "Of course I can. Hand me the letter, I'll give it to Rossy as soon as I see her.", L_Let, "No, sorry, I'm not interested in that sort of task. Hand it to her yourself.", L_No; @@ -91,7 +91,6 @@ L_Cont: L_Let: mes "[Olana]"; set Rossy_Quest, 5; - set gotcherry, 0; mes "\"Thank you again. Please, bring it to her as fast as you can.\""; close; @@ -109,12 +108,12 @@ L_Rose: menu "Hi, Rossy did great in the exam. David told me her potion was flawless.", -; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Wow! Really? That is great! I would like to congratulate my little Rossy, would you help me?\""; + mes "\"Wow! Really? That is great! I would like to congratulate my little Rossy. Would you mind helping me a little more?\""; menu "Just tell me what to do.", -, "No, I'm busy, maybe later.", L_No; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Can you bring me 15 [Red Rose]s? I would like to give them to Rossy. I am sure she will love it!\""; + mes "\"Can you bring me 15 Red Roses? I would like to give them to Rossy. I am sure she will love them!\""; menu "Ok, I will be back with the roses.", L_RG, "I'm allergic to roses, can't even touch them. Sorry.", L_No; @@ -122,7 +121,7 @@ L_Rose: L_RG: if (Rossy_Quest == 8) set Rossy_Quest, 9; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"Please, bring me 15 [Red Rose]s as soon as you can.\""; + mes "\"Please, bring me 15 Red Roses as soon as you can.\""; close; L_RC: @@ -142,22 +141,22 @@ L_Allergic: mes "\"Did she like my present?\""; menu "Sure she did...", L_No, - "Well, you should known that your daughter is allergic to roses.", -; + "Well, you should have known that your daughter is allergic to roses.", -; set Rossy_Quest, 12; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"How stupid I am! Here, take some of my money and buy [Red Tulip]s instead, the same amount. Keep the flowers.\""; + mes "\"Oh, how stupid I am! Here, take some of my money and buy Red Tulips instead, the same amount. Keep the flowers.\""; set zeny, zeny + 1500; next; - mes "\"Please, tell Rossy I am really sorry. My mind was in Julia when I asked you to bring the red roses, they are her favorite.\""; + mes "\"Please, tell Rossy I am really sorry. My mind was on Julia when I asked you to bring the red roses, they are her favorite.\""; menu "I will give her the tulips when I see her.", -; mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\"And don't forget to tell her that I'm really sorry.\""; + mes "\"Thank you. And don't forget to tell her that I'm really sorry.\""; close; L_Give: mes "[Olana]"; - mes "\""+ strcharinfo(0) +", please, get 15 [Red Tulip]s and hand them to Rossy. Don't forget to tell her that I'm really sorry.\""; + mes "\""+ strcharinfo(0) +", please, get 15 Red Tulips and hand them to Rossy. Don't forget to tell her that I'm really sorry.\""; close; L_Best: @@ -174,8 +173,8 @@ L_End: mes "[Olana]"; mes "\"Where is Julia? I want to know where she is! Please, find her "+ strcharinfo(0) +"!\""; menu - "She'll be back soon, trust me, I saved her from an evil spirit.", L_Found, - "I didn't see her yet, sorry.", L_No; + "She'll be back soon, trust me. I saved her from an evil spirit.", L_Found, + "I haven't seen her yet, sorry.", L_No; L_Found: mes "[Olana]"; @@ -195,7 +194,7 @@ L_Clear: L_FinalEnd: mes "[Olana]"; - mes "*The mother is calmly waiting her daughters to come back for dinner.*"; + mes "*The mother is calmly waiting for her daughters to come back for dinner.*"; close; } -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50