From 5df19e3c04e55acad16f28c38ba29055c58d3b85 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Dino Paskvan Date: Mon, 15 Jul 2013 16:05:44 +0200 Subject: Orum and Waric quest proofreading and editing All the NPCs involved in the quest have been edited, with help from Dyna. --- world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt | 34 +++++++++++++++++----------------- 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt') diff --git a/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt b/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt index 340f2959..663d6c07 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/017-4/waric.txt @@ -27,25 +27,25 @@ if (OrumQuest > 15) goto L_Mistrust; mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"You! You're really more insistent than it's good for you...\""; + mes "\"You! You really are far too persistent to know what is good for you!\""; mes "He turns towards Orum."; next; mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"It seems your ridiculous Guarding Spirit failed his task."; - mes "Deal with this, we really can't afford more of this distractions.\""; + mes "\"It seems your ridiculous Guarding Spirit has failed at his task."; + mes "Deal with this. We cannot afford any more of these distractions.\""; goto L_Close; L_Mistrust: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"So you say you want to help us? You don't look very competent."; - mes "Also, I don't see what motivates you to do this.\""; + mes "\"So, you say you want to help us? You do not look very competent."; + mes "Also, I do not see what motivation you have to help.\""; next; - mes "\"Show your usefulness, then I might take you serious.\""; + mes "\"Demonstrate your worth and I might take you seriously.\""; goto L_Close; L_Flower1: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"You placed the first flower. I'm surprised, I didn't expect you to actually stay and be useful.\""; + mes "\"You placed the first flower. Why, I am surprised! I did not expect you to actually stay and become useful.\""; goto L_Close; // TODO: enable this when adding the spells // also add logic to the other label's dialogs/eventually change their dialog to fit better @@ -60,8 +60,8 @@ L_Flower1: if (!@killed_mouboo && !@cut_tree) goto L_Undecided; mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"Hm. Actually, I could do that. You seem to have some potential."; - mes "But first go on with the next summoning artifact.\""; + mes "\"Hmm. I suppose I could do that. You seem to have some potential."; + mes "First, proceed with the next summoning artifact.\""; goto L_Close; L_Flower2: @@ -71,18 +71,18 @@ L_Flower2: L_Flower3: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"I saw that you helped to create the third flower which you just placed. Good.\""; + mes "\"I saw that you helped to create and place the third flower. Good.\""; goto L_Close; L_Flower4: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"We're very close to reach our goal, now that you've placed the fourth flower. Keep it up.\""; + mes "\"Now that you have placed the fourth flower, we are very close to reaching our goal. Keep it up.\""; goto L_Close; L_Flower5: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"Hahaha, excellent. You handled the creation of our pentagram very well. I'll keep that in mind."; - mes "I advised Orum to give you some reward, did you already talk to him?\""; + mes "\"Hahaha, excellent. You handled the creation of our pentagram very well. I will be keeping that in mind."; + mes "I have advised Orum to give you a reward. Go now and speak with him.\""; goto L_Close; L_Spells: @@ -93,14 +93,14 @@ L_Spells: L_Undecided: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"Well. I could. But I'm not sure you're trustworthy.\""; + mes "\"Well, I could. However, I am not sure you are all that trustworthy.\""; next; - mes "\"How can I know you're not going to run to Sagatha with what I'd teach you?\""; + mes "\"How do I know you will not run off to Sagatha with what I would be teaching you?\""; goto L_Close; L_Sagatha: mes "[Waric]"; - mes "\"You're already a student of Sagatha. I won't teach you anything.\""; + mes "\"You are already a student of Sagatha. I will not teach you anything!\""; goto L_Close; L_Close: @@ -142,4 +142,4 @@ L_Close: OnInit: if (!debug) disablenpc "DebugFlowerP"; -} +} \ No newline at end of file -- cgit v1.2.3-60-g2f50