From b20acae9651b87c4fc0090e96bdb77a1f3a773b2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Jesusaves <cpntb1@ymail.com>
Date: Fri, 3 Aug 2018 12:30:41 -0300
Subject: Review Sawis

---
 npc/010-2/sawis.txt | 29 ++++++++++++++++-------------
 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-)

(limited to 'npc/010-2/sawis.txt')

diff --git a/npc/010-2/sawis.txt b/npc/010-2/sawis.txt
index 314e0774f..dd18d68cc 100644
--- a/npc/010-2/sawis.txt
+++ b/npc/010-2/sawis.txt
@@ -4,20 +4,20 @@
 // Reviewer:
 //    Jesusalva
 // Description:
-//    craft desert shirt refert to player msawis
+//    craft desert shirt. Reference to player msawis
 // id:193  HalinarzoQuest_Sawis
 
 010-2,138,122,0	script	Sawis	NPC_PLAYER,{
-    .@Miner = getq(HalinarzoQuest_Sawis);
+    .@q = getq(HalinarzoQuest_Sawis);
     if (BaseLevel < 37) goto L_TooWeak;
-    if (.@Miner == 1) goto L_Check;
-    if (.@Miner == 2) goto L_Complete;
+    if (.@q == 1) goto L_Check;
+    if (.@q == 2) goto L_Complete;
 
 L_GiveTask:
     mesn;
     mesq lg("Hello, wanderer!");
     next;
-    mesq l("No one visit me, im in peace there.");
+    mesq l("No one visit me, I'mm in peace there.");
     next;
 
     menu
@@ -30,15 +30,15 @@ L_Quest:
     mesq l("I do some research about evolution of snake skin subject to hard sunlight.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("Then i craft some new typê of stronge desert shirt, to protect user from snake and sunlight.");
+    mesq l("Then I craft some new type of strong desert shirt, to protect users from snakes and sunlight.");
     next;
     mesn;
-    mesq l("If you bring me some items, I can craft one for you and you will be my test subject.");
+    mesq l("If you bring me some items, I can craft one for you. You will be my test subject.");
     next;
 
     menu
-        l("Yeah sure? What do you need?"), L_Start,
-        l("Nah, sorry everythings good for me."), L_Quit;
+        l("Yeah, sure? What do you need?"), L_Start,
+        l("Nah, sorry, everything is good with me."), L_Quit;
 
 L_Start:
     setq HalinarzoQuest_Sawis, 1;
@@ -98,7 +98,10 @@ L_Give:
 
 L_Complete:
     mesn;
-    mesq l("As i see, you stay alive!.");
+    mesq l("As I see, you stay alive!");
+    next;
+    mesn;
+    mesq l("I must keep notes of this.");
     close;
 
 // Funnier to write than to read, but the player lied. :angel:
@@ -106,13 +109,13 @@ L_Lying:
     mesn;
     mesq l("No no no, that's wrong.");
     next;
-    mesc l("You dont have all item required.");
+    mesc l("Actually, you could be really useful testing Snake Poison. What do you think about that?");
     next;
     goto L_List;
 
 L_TooWeak:
     mesn;
-    mesq l("What are you doing here this place is too dangerous for you!");
+    mesq l("What are you doing here? This place is too dangerous for you!");
     close;
 
 OnInit:
@@ -124,7 +127,7 @@ OnInit:
     setunitdata(.@npcId, UDT_HAIRCOLOR, 7);
 
     .sex = G_MALE;
-    .distance = 4;
+    .distance = 5;
 
     end;
 }
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