From 2ed796ed16b76094293e492973820d1d90623a29 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Frost Date: Mon, 23 Jan 2012 12:27:30 -0800 Subject: Minor grammar edits to birrod, kimarr, and yerrnk --- world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt | 26 +++++++++++++------------- 1 file changed, 13 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-) (limited to 'world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt') diff --git a/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt b/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt index c0e159e3..28dd6c56 100644 --- a/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt +++ b/world/map/npc/033-1/birrod.txt @@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ L_Kimarr: mes "[Birrod]"; mes "\"Great! Very well done! Welcome to our tribe.\""; next; - mes "\"But I think, Kimarr has something for you.\""; + mes "\"I think Kimarr has something for you.\""; goto L_Close; L_Hunting: @@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ L_Hunting: mes "\"Hello, " + strcharinfo(0) + "! Would you like to prove your hunting skills again?\""; next; mes "\"I noticed some groups of Wolverns in the forest west of here which are unusually aggressive."; - mes "This makes it dangerous for all the small people from the town nearby to go there.\""; + mes "This makes it dangerous for all the small people from the nearby town to go there.\""; next; mes "\"To prove your skills, go to the forest and hunt down " + $@Q_Barbarians_wolvern_amount + " of the very aggressive Wolverns.\""; next; @@ -72,14 +72,14 @@ L_Wolverns_Done: getexp @wolvern_exp, 0; if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0) goto L_Not_Ready; - mes "\"Your skills are impressing. You are worthy to be called a warrior of the Mangarr, if you accept.\""; + mes "\"Your skills are impressive. You are worthy to be called a warrior of the Mangarr, if you accept.\""; next; goto L_Questions; L_Questions: if (getskilllv(SKILL_POOL) == 0) goto L_Not_Ready; - mes "Birrod has a very ceremonial look on his face."; + mes "Birrod has a very solemn look on his face."; mes "[Birrod]"; mes "\"" + strcharinfo(0) + ", are you ready to become a full-fledged member of our tribe, the Mangarr?\""; menu @@ -89,13 +89,13 @@ L_Questions: mes "Birrod nods earnestly."; mes "[Birrod]"; mes "\"I will ask you some questions."; - mes "Think well and be honest, because it will depend on your answers if you will be considered worthily.\""; + mes "Think well and be honest, because your answers will determine whether you are worthy.\""; next; mes "\"What's the most important thing for a true warrior?\""; menu "Strength!",L_Fail11, "A good weapon.",L_Fail12, - "Braveness.",L_Success11; + "Bravery.",L_Success11; L_Fail11: mes "[Birrod]"; mes "\"Strength is indeed important for a warrior. But before you can show strength, you need to have something else.\""; @@ -122,7 +122,7 @@ L_Fail21: goto L_No_Member; L_Fail22: mes "[Birrod]"; - mes "\"Honorably but stupid.\""; + mes "\"Honorable, but stupid.\""; next; goto L_No_Member; L_Success21: @@ -152,8 +152,8 @@ L_Fail31: L_Success3: mes "\"What is your goal in life?\""; menu - "Learning new things and see the world.",L_Success41, - "Becoming as powerful as I can.",L_Fail41, + "Learn new things and see the world.",L_Success41, + "Become as powerful as I can.",L_Fail41, "Protect the ones I love.",L_Success42; L_Success41: mes "[Birrod]"; @@ -194,17 +194,17 @@ L_Success5: setskill SKILL_WARRIOR_RAGING, 1; set @state, 6; callsub S_Update_Mask; - mes "You feel an exciting vim inside of you."; + mes "You feel an exciting energy inside you."; mes "[Birrod]"; mes "\"You are now a warrior of the Mangarr.\""; next; - mes "\"Therefore you gain the ability to put back your own safety for Raging in battle with a tremendous power."; - mes "This power now lies within you, waiting for someone to help you focusing on it.\""; + mes "\"As a Mangarr warrior, you gain the ability to put back your own safety for Raging in battle with a tremendous power."; + mes "This power now lies within you, waiting for someone to help you focus on it.\""; goto L_Close; L_Impressed: mes "[Birrod]"; - mes "\"I'm very proud of you being a member of the tribe.\""; + mes "\"I'm very proud that you're a member of the tribe.\""; goto L_Close; L_Not_Ready: -- cgit v1.2.3-70-g09d2